please read it. i know its long but i need to had this in in 2 days as my final project http://www.short-story.net/story.php?s=864 . Any and all opinions are welcome PLEASE. you have to ckick the link in order to read the whole thing....PLEASE
Red Snow
As I stalk the night I locate my prey. A man and a woman, young and in love. They embrace one another , guarding each other against the pending storm. It is this act of affection which marks them as unwilling participants in tonights games. how dare they be so happy? Enjoying life while I am cast aside by society to wander my pitiful existence. Tonight I will once again exact my revenge on those who have ruined my life.
2007-06-12 06:33:40 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
I think it's pretty good, and that you found the right words to make it vivid. Good organization as well. Just watch your spelling, even if it didn't affect the story much...other than that, pretty sweet indeed.
2007-06-12 06:41:01 · answer #1 · answered by Banana Hero [sic] 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I loved it until you got up to the description
of the man and the woman, but it could be only me
its as though the story kind of stopped there
and then continued after the explanation....
but I got lost in your words...great story....
2007-06-12 06:50:04 · answer #2 · answered by ♥Saw Dust♥ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Oh dear. The couple you just described sounds like my husband and I...are you stalking us? j/k
It's good. It's not very long at all. Good job. Try to take out some of the "I" (when referring to the first person). It will be better.
2007-06-12 06:40:46 · answer #3 · answered by Harlequin 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Ummm, it's kinda creepy. It didn't really make sense at the end, but it's very descriptive and dreamy.
2007-06-12 06:38:31 · answer #4 · answered by mtngrl 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow it was really good. I enjoyed it thoroughly. =)
2007-06-12 06:41:27 · answer #5 · answered by If your a bird, I'm a bird.. 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
stop using so many capitals
2007-06-12 06:37:46 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
sounds like my life.. not kidding thanks for putting it into words
not the love part .. the ruin part yeah its pretty good.
2007-06-12 06:37:14 · answer #7 · answered by ♥lois c♥ ☺♥♥♥☺ 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
its good! depressing..but i think it is really good!!! great job!
2007-06-12 06:53:22 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it!
2007-06-12 06:37:49 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋