living in a world of silence
making up excuses to be left alone
its the people that just want to stay home
they scream for peacefulness
receive bloody lies
honesty is what we all desire
affection we all crave
but its those lonely people that are empty
when they go to their grave
we all pray to be saved
in a world of turmoil
we all watch as it caves
where did it all begin
everyone living in an awful sin
and when does it all end
will we all be forgiven?
no one knows how to pray
they all eat on each other like prey
2007-06-11 19:58:34 · 8 answers · asked by Mee~mOe~ 5 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I told you, you have talent! You need to do something with these poems you write...
2007-06-12 04:40:48 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I dont like it, too long and it jogged my memory greater of a tale. i did no longer examine all of it regardless of the undeniable fact that, that's in basic terms too long for my flavor. Sorry, it extremely is in basic terms my very own opinion. Plus i do no longer look after romance poems or something approximately love.
2016-10-09 01:03:22 · answer #2 · answered by debruyne 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, speakin as a fellow poet, I would say that I love it, but I also think that it doesn't quite seem completed yet! Maybe I'll post one of my poems on here sometime, and see what you think!
2007-06-12 06:56:20 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is ok but it need more peace words in it what is up with eat on each other like prey?
2007-06-11 20:03:31 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
wow!!i really liked that one!esp,the last remark...."they all eat each other like prey"deep!!!
2007-06-11 23:10:00 · answer #5 · answered by ....FED UP............ 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
very deep meemoe!!!
you really has the talent!
2007-06-13 02:43:56 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
very powerful
2007-06-12 05:08:36 · answer #7 · answered by Soulshine 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
good poem darn good
2007-06-12 02:26:55 · answer #8 · answered by little sexy 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋