Need Help with Movie i am writing?

Question

17 year old returns to school after a previous year of a bad reputatuion and being bullied and deals with problems as a junior i high school. He meets a girl who is a senior and 2
years older than Him and she helps him develop and they fall in love untill he abandons her for friends he thinks are true but is only a set up to be embarred him at Junior prom. He is betrayed and reunites later with the girl and attends Senior prom where he says something to offend her and she runs out and so does he. They both talk and they confess they love each other an movie ends with a big Kiss scene. He is shy, abusive and keeps people in relationships by force and is not very social and he is Black. She is white, rebellious and is opposite of him.
short version so it is not very detailed.
Is this a good Plot for my movie?
What should thier names Be and why?
Should i include sex and some violence?

Our school has two proms so it might be kind of strange to you to hear about a Junior and Senior prom.

Answer 1

Yikes you have a lot going on here.
O.K. lets start with some good points. You have some complicated characters in a setting that many people can relate to.
Now for some critiques, first if you are going to write a movie, be a writer at all times. What you have is something of a jumbled mess and with having such a short space to describe your idea every word counts.
A 17 year old returns to his high school and problems after a traumatic sophomore year. He meets a girl who sees above their differences to slowly brings him out of his dark shell, and although they agree to go to the Junior prom together his friends betray him as a plot to ruin his reputation and his relationship. Some event or circumstance revels to him the love that he had and he decides to gamble what he has left of his heart to be with the one he loves at senior prom. Eventually they find each other and confess their love ending the film with a passionate kiss.

I think this would be a good outline for a film.
I would drop the Black/White thing unless it's really critical for the story line, it distracts as does the shy/abusive personality split. As for their names up to you, you need to know your characters so you need to name them. Finally I find that 95% of the time sex and violence in movies tends to be simply a lazy writer/director trying to shock or fill time. Write the story first and if you find you need those elements add them when necessary.

Good Luck!

Answer 2

You should never, ever reveal your plot in public like this. You've just posted it for anyone to read -- a quick writer could steal it, develop it, publish it, and profit from it.

You can inquire about writing style/form from others, but should never discuss actual plot machinations. When I'm working on something, I don't even tell friends what the characters are like.

The one bit of direct advice I can give is to avoid completely plotting something from start to finish. Most good writers [and writing teachers] will tell you this. Devise an interesting beginning and maybe have a germ of an idea about tone, but don't draw a roadmap in cement. The reason is that, in aiming for the next plot twist, you'll naturally try to get to it quickly, resulting in a lurching and unnatural pace. Instead, begin at page one and just start writing -- let a story flow naturally. Trust me, it's amazing to find yourself typing away and realize that the story starts writing itself.

And always strive to write a good story first and foremost. Don't try to write a "hit," don't think about riches you'll earn, don't think about what the sequel will be about, and don't dwell on thoughts of what other people will think. Just write a good, engaging story. And get the damned thing on paper -- in other words, what you're writing is going to be your first draft, so don't keep stopping to search for the right word or to go back and fix something. Just get that sucker on the page -- you can do plastic surgery later. :-)

Answer 3

No sex and no violence. And I don't like that he keeps people in relationships by force. That's not a good protagonist,friend. Yeesh. I'm creeped out. Name them Bloxial and Sam. Ya just don't hear the name Bloxial anymore. Oh, and maybe that's why he is shy. He doesn't like telling people his name is Bloxial. Ick really. Well, okay besides the Bloxial randomness stick to a refreshing no sex/violence movie. That'd be nice.

Answer 4

rahn and brianna ,but the black man white woman has been done over and over.they can be opposite and still be the same color .she's a senior and two years older did she fail or something.if he is shy why can't he be just that, and be pu**y whipped buy the older chick who means well but is just to much for him to handle.and let the girl he abandoned her for be his age but is really the true freak and only wants him for a hot night at the prom. p.s i would love to play the older chick!!!

Answer 5

Its not bad. His name should be a strong name that suggests he is tougher than most, so it can't be something like Gene. Hers has to show that she is loveable and kind. Maybe Emily. Sex but classy sex. Maybe show them kissing and going under the sheets but not too extreme. Keep the violence as a part of the movie to show his past but don't make it a violent movie.

Answer 6

1) Schools don't have two proms......change it. Make the first dance a "winter formal" or something....or it could be he just stood her up.
2) Everything you put in should be there for a reason.....how does this girls help him "develop?" Grades? Athletics? Socially? Please not dancing!
3) They have to have something in common....develop the characters motivations better.
Good luck,
-H

Answer 7

Jungle Fever meets Carrie. What's going to make your film unique? Abusive outcast meets the stubborn girl that fights to get him back on the right track, he abandons her then they reunite and kiss. Seen it before. You need a hook.

Answer 8

mum... thinking

Lily and Leo

Lilith supposedly Adams first wife

Leo because it is what i came up with

you have some work

Answer 9

Inter-racial sex is a good one. Please, add it and info me to watch it. IR-sex produces healthy offsprings. You can encourage it at least thro' your movie. All the best!!!