i don't know if this could really count as a poem?....?

Question

does it count as a poem? and it doesn't rhyme.

title-i am what i am

I am as old as air,

new as a baby's breath.

i am a prison.

i am the key.

i am the knife that cuts,

the salve that heals.

i am a weapon.

i am a gesture of peace.

i am longed for and hated,

cursed and loved,

sought and despised.

more lies are told in my name

than there are birds in the air.

i bring pain and i bring relief.

i bring sorrow and i bring joy.

i am what i am.

comments? concerns? criticism?

Answer 1

i am a weapon.

i am a gesture of peace.

i am longed for and hated,

You don't have to repeat 'i am'. Just go straight into 'a gesture... and ...longed for...'. Following the initial line, the reader will be able to see that all the latter statements refer to the self.


more lies are told in my name

than there are birds in the air.

That doesn't sound quite right.


Keep at it. You'll get better.

Answer 2

I think it's pretty good. I write poetry and got first place in a contest so I say, maybe a little more description because - yes it tells different things but you're naming them and not saying exactly WHY for any. If you need more info feel free to write me.

Answer 3

I think its a great poem! I really like it, I'm a poet myself, but I've never written that kind of poem!

Keep writing!!!!!!!!!!

Answer 4

Poetry doesn't have to rhyme. Yes, this "counts" as a poem.

Answer 5

not all poems rhym. most poems that dont rhym are free verse.
its a pretty ok poem. the answer before this one is really good.

Answer 6

good the is poem you written have nice

Answer 7

Its more like a riddle.

Answer 8

a poem can be anything. it doesn't have to rhyme... i think it's an okay poem...