the beginning of my story
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Gran is such a neat freak. Whenever I take a drink upstairs, she says, “That is going to make a mess, Eva.” If I don’t keep my room perfectly clean, she says, “This is a total pigsty, Eva.” It gets a little annoying, not that I’m complaining. Gran has been really good to me. She doesn’t do the pinch the cheeks, bear hug thing. She is a fairly cool grandmother now that I think about it. It is just a little awkward without my mom or dad around.
Gran sometimes visits dad, but I haven’t been able to bring myself to go. It is too hard to see his scarred face, knowing he can’t see mine. I visited a few times after the accident, but as more time passes, there is less and less hope for his recovery. It hurts too much to see so weak and fragile. I would rather remember as that big, strong man who would lift me up off the air for a hug and gave me piggy back rides when I felt tired. He was my real life superhero. That is how I want to remember him.
2007-06-10 04:55:12 · 16 answers · asked by iANNA! 5 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
It sounds really interesting so far! Keep it up!
2007-06-10 04:58:44 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Interesting
2007-06-17 17:30:29 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Oh PLEASE go see your DAD. You may have a hard time, but what hard thing to go through. If you lost your sight, girl, he wouln't leave you side I swear. You CAN do this thing!
I am gong to pray for you. You are going to be alright, strong and brave.
Your dad gave you live adn love, now you have the opportunity to give him some super duper love in return.
Hearing your voice, knowing your there will help with the healing.
What if he is not healing well cause he thinks that you don't care?
Oh my god, I thought you were telling the truth :)
Good story line..
2007-06-17 16:22:50 · answer #3 · answered by HA! HA! HA! 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love stories that start out like this. They let you know that if you continue reading, you'll find out what's happening in the beginning, and why her dad is all scarred. I think it sounds great.. keep up the great work :) Who knows, maybe someday, I'll check this out at the library!
2007-06-17 16:45:47 · answer #4 · answered by Jess 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I say that's pretty good so far! It seems like there are only just two places where you forgot a "he" or a "him" but it sounds good. And if you didn't mind, maybe you can email me some more of the story as it comes along? Thanks! I'd love to critique it...
2007-06-10 04:59:53 · answer #5 · answered by YinxSphinxmen 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You should see him before he goes but it is a good thing that you want only good memories
2007-06-17 17:16:34 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
if its a story its a good stat.if its for real you should see your dad as much as possible because one day he will not be around and you will never forgive yourself.
2007-06-17 16:09:39 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good. I think it'll be a very interesting story.
2007-06-18 01:56:57 · answer #8 · answered by ♥jxle0807♥ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice start
2007-06-17 17:13:54 · answer #9 · answered by It's Whatever 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Love is the key.
2007-06-17 20:42:08 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
probably more interesting towards women than men.
2007-06-18 04:46:22 · answer #11 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋