Are these sentences grammatically consistent?

Question

The hairs of his neck stoop up when he saw hundreds of people dressed in black sitting on every chair on the church. There was a little girl holding a wet mossy teddy bear and a man with amputated arm. A bruised old woman with purplish complexion was starring at him with an evil smile. At the corner there was a man with a bloody face and he looks crazed and restless.

Answer 1

there no mistakes unless i messed a typo but the are a bit too many adjectives.

Answer 2

No, this is not grammatically consistent. The spelling is atrocious. It should read:
The hairs on his neck stood up when he saw hundreds of people dressed in black sitting on the chairs in the church. Every chair was occupied. There was a little girl holding a wet mossy teddy bear and a man with an amputated arm. A bruised old woman with purplish complexion was staring at him with an evil smile. In the corner there was a man with a bloody face, he looked crazed and restless.

Answer 3

Witchnanny is correct. I'd like to add that you seem to be having most of your trouble with prepositions of location. For example: in and on. Think of a box and a book. If you put the book IN the box, and close the box, now you can't see it. If you close the box and then put the book ON the box, now it's on top of the box and you can see it. So, when you say, "sitting ON the chair," you are correct, but when you say "on the church," this means you would go outside and look up and the person would be on the roof! As for the preposition "at," that's another story. We say "in" the corner in English, even though you can see the person. Language rules are not consistent.