Visions and dreams are painted
on the canvas of the heart to be replayed.
Joy and tears enter,
brush strokes so fine and detailed
Into the depths are the lines and shadows,
with glint and glare
Like the heart that beats.
The river that flows.
Motion, life is given to our memories
fore ground, back ground.
heaven and earth
heart and soul
For the picture love has painted
in our always stays
Love never dies.
2007-06-09 08:33:30 · 7 answers · asked by kiphyn b 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
i am a poet too have been for a long time. That was a good poem for it being your first..keep up on the good work.
2007-06-09 11:14:59 · answer #1 · answered by Breenee 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
as I was just telling Breenee,
why do you not join us at poetbay?
it's a somehow small friendly poetry community.
if you type www.poetbay.com, it doesn't work though since it leads to the sweden version of poetbay.
simply search "poetbay" in google and click on it.
if this is your first time, then you seem to be pretty good at poetry :o)
2007-06-09 10:47:54 · answer #2 · answered by simply me 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wooooow!!! ur a first time poet?? i write poetry too but they never come out sounding like that. its like an expert wrote that!! i loooooove it!! u should seriously go to poetry.com and enter ur poem in their contest, u might win!!! ^^
2007-06-09 08:38:16 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
um... it is really good for a first timer. But I think you can and will get better.
2007-06-09 08:42:22 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wha?
2007-06-09 08:44:00 · answer #5 · answered by The Phat Whale 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That had an AMAZING flow.
I like it quite a lot.
2007-06-09 08:50:13 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
very Nice!!!
2007-06-09 10:39:16 · answer #7 · answered by bronzebabekentucky 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋