do you like my poem?

Question

I built a shied around my heart
I don’t cry nor smile
My skies are gray and stormy
I am consistently angry and irritated
I want to cry but can’t, my tears are all dried up
I am lonely too, I have no friends
Lately suicide has been in my head, poisoning my brain
I could slit my wrists
Or jump off a building
Any thing is possible
Why I am like this a truly don’t know
My heart just started braking and my spirit died

Answer 1

Indigo,
I Love poetry and writing I believe it's a great way of expression!
Feelings especially the very strong , maybe even scary ones need to be let out, or they will kind of eat you up inside, in many different ways! I say KEEP writing girl!
Put everything out on paper no matter how you think it may sound, after all the beauty of art is in the eye of the beholder!
This will heal you... Just write, write, write,
And express yourself.

Answer 2

Wow, that's a lot of emotion. Perhaps this is a cry for help? I am a writer who feels that maybe you should talk to someone, namely a health care professional and ask them to read this. For such a short piece which is not part of a larger body of work, it causes one to wonder if the author is truly the one affected by such dark and suicidal thoughts. Good luck.

Answer 3

Nothing to do with philosophy. Quite boring. Bad grammar and spelling.

Answer 4

I don't like your poem.. sorry sweetie.. because your poem is sad.. and let me tell you something.. your spirit never dies... just hold yourself together and there is always space for new starts...

Answer 5

This is not a poem.... Its sounds more like a cry for help.

Answer 6

yes i think i like your poem because its so sweet.

Answer 7

likes it.
it doesn't rhyme or flow very good.
but it makes us feel, and we can relate to that.

Answer 8

its alright, very cliche...