He didn’t dream as he slept like a baby. He had no idea that there were eyes watching over him as he lay down on a church bench. The church might be called the House of God but God lives in the heavens above and not on a structure built by mortals. Milton is clueless that he was surrounded by entities who consider that place as their own home.
2007-06-07 21:13:55 · 2 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
He didn’t dream as he slept like a baby. He had had no idea that there were eyes watching over him as he had lain down on a church bench. The church might be called the House of God, but God lives in the heavens above and not on a structure built by mortals. Milton was clueless that he was surrounded by entities who considered that place as their own home.
Changed 'had' to 'had had' and 'lay' to 'had lain'. Those actions occurred before he slept, which is past tense, so they have to be in a tense farther back on the time line - past perfect.
Added one comma (after God). The two clauses are independent.
Changed tense in last sentence to past tense to be consistent with the first sentence.
2007-06-08 03:05:08 · answer #1 · answered by dollhaus 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes. I don't see any problems. Sentence structure could be improved though.
2007-06-08 04:37:34 · answer #2 · answered by Su Gi C 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋