He wanted a different place to stay, somewhere more comfortable and dry, he is tired but he wants to pick the right place. Then he saw an old heritage site church.
2007-06-07 15:08:32 · 5 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
I think it should be kept in the past tense:
he was tired but he wanted to pick the right place
2007-06-07 15:12:43 · answer #1 · answered by Sylvia H 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
He wanted a different place to stay, somewhere more comfortable and dry. He WAS tired but he WANTED to pick the right place. Then, he saw an old heritage site church.
2007-06-07 22:19:05 · answer #2 · answered by beentheredonethat 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The tenses are wrong, as you use both the present and past tenses. Grammatically, the first sentence is a run-on.
"He wanted a different place to stay; someone more comfortable and dry. He was tired, but he wanted to pick the right place."
That would be the best way to fix it.
2007-06-07 22:17:19 · answer #3 · answered by Avocado 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
He wanted a different place to stay, somewhere more comfortable and dry. HE WAS TIRED , he is tired but HE WANTED he wants to pick the right place. Then he saw an old heritage site church.
Corrections in capitals.
2007-06-07 22:12:31 · answer #4 · answered by thisbrit 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Gramatically, it's weak. Tenses and such are fine, but you may want to refine your style.
2007-06-07 22:12:09 · answer #5 · answered by Heather CRUNK 2 · 0⤊ 2⤋