Pressed against a glass window
What lies in the future, I do not know
Emtions, feelings, love and pain
Shields me like it shields the rain
Pressed against a glass window
Being trapped, kept from where I wish to go
Dreams and felings put on hold
Must reliy on what I've been told
Pressed against a glass window
Trying to feel more
But the only chance I have of that
Is walking out the door
2007-06-07 12:52:45 · 13 answers · asked by ***Lena*** 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Touching.
Keep up the good work.
2007-06-07 12:55:14 · answer #1 · answered by Zeera 7 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I can totally connect with it. Very good writing. One suggestion though. If trying to set a certain rhythm, either set this rhythm with spaces in between the words, or change the wording a bit. Otherwise, it's wonderful!
2007-06-07 12:56:25 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes it is quite good work a bit more on it after you put it down for a week more clarity to what you are expressing will come keep up the good work write each day
2007-06-07 13:00:21 · answer #3 · answered by try 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The drivel of an egomaniac with no real problems.
2007-06-07 12:55:46 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it okay, intensely written, but well delivered. Be sure and do spell check, okay sweetie, keep your head clear and your pencil sharp! LOL ;}
2007-06-07 12:59:05 · answer #5 · answered by Shur-fire 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
touching.
i like reading peoples poetry =]
some people on yahoo answers could be the next shakesphere, like you for instance!
he he. i enjoyed your poem ♥
2007-06-07 12:59:29 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
yes i like it. is this written by you? if it is keep up the good work =]
2007-06-07 12:56:28 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
interesting poem ... good rhyming ... couldn't catch the tempo though ...
2007-06-07 13:58:50 · answer #8 · answered by Special K 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you really know how to write these kind of stuff. that was great.
hey! can you make a poem about your feelings and can you send it to me. please!!
2007-06-07 12:58:06 · answer #9 · answered by NejiAtTheDisco 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
it was nice...
just a few spelling errors but that can be fixed......
2007-06-07 13:10:33 · answer #10 · answered by Minty 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋