Sitting atop a broken hill
laughing as dark music played.
She looked allot lot like you,
not timid or afraid.
Smokey air falling softly,
As heaven and hell were set free
echoes of one good love
singing, "maybe one day it will be".
Clouds of thunder rolling by,
eyes toward a magic sky.
sun and moon all a blur,
moaning wind,
shivering sea,
iron heart made soft by thee,
singing, "maybe one day it will be".
from the first day,
to the last,
born without you,
and sinking fast.
a ship alone... yet alive, and free
singing, "maybe one day it will be”
PSS...
A little background...
(I was at an outdoor concert that night.An ominous black storm was brewing on the horizon, and I was wishing so deeply that she was there with me. Then I saw a beautiful girl who looked just like her, laughing, and enjoying the music, the night, and time with her friends. So...this short song was born. It's melody rings like her voice in my ear.)
2007-06-07 06:44:18 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
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2007-06-14 14:14:02 · answer #1 · answered by Mon-chu' 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Riki's going to take exhilaration in this. in assessment, Nancy's gonna bounce on a flight and hunt you down! ;-D i won't be able to say that I certainly have written something for everybody on right here. in common terms some music dedications right here and there. EDIT: i replaced into precise! ^
2017-01-10 18:10:09 · answer #2 · answered by ponyah 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
a surrogate? an contingency plan? Oh so male!
Oh so fickle! Oh so honest!
This has great imagery especially
" echoes" "and sinking fast"
It is not a favourite, sorry , the sentiment irritates me, as the mother of two sons.
and the rule about not discussing an old love with a new love holds true about a new love to an old love as well.
2007-06-14 14:44:48 · answer #3 · answered by pat 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice. Just correct your typo (allot), put a comma after the first line, and capitalize Maybe.
2007-06-07 06:48:14 · answer #4 · answered by Alice K 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice. Obviously you are very much in love and I wish you all the luck I have had. I've been married 26 years and it keeps getting better!
2007-06-07 07:46:43 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its nice.....but i read it kinda slow. if you're goin with the whole song thing i'd pick it up with some distortion and or heavy melody.... good lyrics!
2007-06-07 06:50:52 · answer #6 · answered by rainsparrow 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like how it rhymes and everything...
but the only thing that bothers me is poems that say "thee."
I don't know why...i guess i'm weird.
2007-06-07 06:48:18 · answer #7 · answered by JESSY JAY! 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋