Stain
Suddenly the tears are back
The tears that I had sent away
So carefully had wrapped them up
I hoped they wouldn't, not today
Today I want to smile and grin
Not cry the tears of pain
yet eventhough I'm happy now
The past is still a stain
Every now and other day
The tears flow irresistably
Have to let them
Let them go
No matter the humility
Tears of pain
Tears of loss
Tears of shattered confidence
Yet I let them
Let them pass
Essential inner influence
Suddenly the tears are back
The tears that I had sent away
So carefully had wrapped them up
But they decided for today
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2007-06-06 12:21:01 · 13 answers · asked by freebird31wizard 6 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
personally, the word poetry and me dont go well together. please dont be offended, but i hate poetry. but, yours is an exception. i really like it. and its soo realistic and sounds so real. u r a true poet. my sister, shreya, likes poetry. i can't wait to show her this poem.
2007-06-06 13:20:17 · answer #1 · answered by nicole 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
really good. hows mine: You're Loved
(this poem is dedicated to a very special friend at school, who has been hurt, who's family was split and who can never find adults who will listen and help her.. This is for you)
You have a guy
You have a dad
you have a mom
you're never sad
you seem to like,
it makes me glad
Then one day
without a warning
they're ripped away
without your word
without your say
go take you life,
you can you may
but always know
You're loved always
though it may not seem that way
you may feel alone
cold at home
but here i sit thinking of you
you're the twin i never had
Know this, its true, and be glad
you're loved
you run out the door,
you beg to the sky
what you did to get this,
and why oh why?
you feel alone and you
want to die
you're so depressed
you have no one
you think its it
you're life is done
but it's not true
you're life has begun
as long as you remember
You're loved always
though it may not seem that way
you may feel alone
cold at home
but here i sit thinking of you
you're the twin i never had
know this, its true, be glad,
honey your loved
2007-06-06 12:33:00 · answer #2 · answered by psych_superfan 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
How do you think of these things? You are very smart. And your poem is very good. You should enter it in a contest it is very good.
2007-06-06 12:27:46 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
i think it's beautiful in a sad way - but tears can be good.
the poem is amazing....just keep writing !
2007-06-06 12:50:20 · answer #4 · answered by The Unknown Soldier 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it
2007-06-06 12:24:41 · answer #5 · answered by MtnMn 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Pretty good. I like how you ended it how it began.
2007-06-06 12:44:00 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats a really good peom
2007-06-06 12:25:25 · answer #7 · answered by pepper 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
it is simple, straightforward and not to mention GREAT!keep writing and expressing yourself so well. : )
2007-06-06 13:25:54 · answer #8 · answered by * 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
sounds good
2007-06-06 12:23:15 · answer #9 · answered by nmarq 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
beautiful!!!do you have a broken heart,too?!
2007-06-06 12:31:26 · answer #10 · answered by ....FED UP............ 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋