On a scale of 1-10, (10 being best) how do you rate this poem?

Question

"We named her America"

her head supports the Rushmore
her shoulders support its weight
her love fills Grand Canyons
that will never erode away
the Redwood trees, her hair
the Pacific Ocean, her soul
Colorado snow, the feel of her skin
Texas, the warmth of her glow
her sexy California sand
and seductive Northern Light
her passion erupts volcanoes
in every island of Hawaii
she comes in different colors
in every state and every name
she canvises her artwork
deep within Nevada caves
the Hoover Dam holds back her joy
she yearns to be set free
she flirts with all the oceans
and kisses all the seas
plays hard-to-get with streams and lakes
but floods when she's abused
her North Virginia body
an alluring blue danube
she's a blessing and a godsend
to all who stake her claim
we named her America
in honor of her grace

Answer 1

i like it. i can't get a clear picture.

Answer 2

I give your poem an eight out of a 10 because of these:

1. Good balance and rhyme.
2. Poor punctuation and capitalization used.
3. Spelling could be better.
4. Each new sentence must have the first word capitalized, using commas, semicolons, or periods before and after.

Answer 3

America? Well, I'm sorry, but America is not the United States.

However, your poem reminds me of John Donne's Elegy 20, and because I am in a good mood, I am copying some of it here:

Licence my roving hands, and let them go
Before, behind, between, above, below.
O, my America, my Newfoundland,
My kingdom, safest when with one man mann'd,
My mine of precious stones, my empery ;
How am I blest in thus discovering thee !
To enter in these bonds, is to be free ;
Then, where my hand is set, my soul shall be.

Answer 4

Since a negative isn't allowed, on a scale of 1 ~ 10, I'd give it anything below 1.

Answer 5

I really like it but the Danube river isn't in America, it's in Europe. But still an eight, I think

Answer 6

very vivid and emotive. it could use some punctuation to help with flow.

you should visit www.voicesnet.com to hone your skills--they have the best online poetry community i've ever encountered... (some places are quite stuck up--VN is like a big family)

look for me there, i'll help you out or point you to someone who can (my username there is sxyvxn3779 ).

Answer 7

How nice - 10+

Answer 8

I'd give u a 10

Answer 9

I think it's lovely. I give it a 10 ... because it's lovely and because ee cummings didn't use punctuation either and I love him!

Answer 10

7. I just didn't like the first two lines.

Answer 11

its idealistic and "Manifest Destiny"-ish thats nice...Lovely overall. 8 to 9.