World of harm watching people faking their charm liars out only for pleasures seeking nothing but greed its like they all like to feed that bad seed nothing better, everything worsen lovers captured within a war one even knows what for sexual acts no one ever knows the facts rape, abuse, used, and accused absorbing empty lonely air everyone thinking life is so unfair deep sadness surrounds us all grabbing us what was hidden within us therein our dreams we always fall does anyone even care didn't they teach you in kindergarten to share why is it, it seems every lovers fight not realizing those beautiful nights stop and think instead of pushing and shoving on everyone just assumes life stinks where is the happiness all I see is loneliness coldness, carelessness no one comforting or playing fairness its a cruel world we all live in but its all just what we make it to beloving and happiness is the way to be free
2007-06-06 03:58:02 · 8 answers · asked by Mee~mOe~ 5 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
wow .. what a view you have on freedom there
2007-06-06 04:00:40 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think it is excellent, and has a real 'rap' rhythm to it. If you really like to write and publish I'd suggest writing.com. There are hundreds of authors there who will comment on your work, and help you grow as a writer.
Keep at it, this is excellent - very insightful
2007-06-06 11:07:29 · answer #2 · answered by Peter A 1 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I love the message -- it's deep and it talks about the reality of the world today. Keep it up. :)
2007-06-06 11:11:05 · answer #3 · answered by Ms Ghost 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I likes!!! Listen to Lauren Hill unplugged..."I get out" You will thank me later. You have talent girlie=D!!!
2007-06-06 11:39:13 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
It belongs one category down.
2007-06-06 11:05:39 · answer #5 · answered by Sophist 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
wow!deep and sad,like most of us feel!when will we be free of the pain?
2007-06-06 11:15:11 · answer #6 · answered by ....FED UP............ 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
That is so cool,nice,open I love it,, Can I use it to make a song...pleaaaase!!
please reply...
2007-06-06 11:08:34 · answer #7 · answered by ? 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
cool..put it in stanzas now to make it more appealing to the eye.
2007-06-06 11:05:48 · answer #8 · answered by XxForever&EverxX 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋