Immortal love so willingly shared,
It is all about the way you have cared,
For each tear I shed before you,
You bring me ten smiles, by the things you do.
Your selflessness, protection and devotion,
Mixed together in a beautiful concoction
Of your love, which each day I drink,
Thus grows stronger each and every link
Between father and child,
Nursed with care mild,
This eternal, unbreakable chain,
For linked we are in pleasure and pain.
And all I can give you in return,
Is a promise that I shall never turn
My back on you, whatever the situation be,
I will be there when you need me
(its 4 father's day)
2007-06-03 23:10:15 · 8 answers · asked by NATALIE 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
plz have a look at my other poem too.i gave it yesterday,so you'll hav to go back a few pages.please tell me
which one's better???thanks for your trouble
2007-06-04 01:26:24 · update #1
plz take a look at this one as well.thanks
Dark and deep stretches the night,
Silentily stilled by the pale moonlight,
Broken moonbeams fall through the leaves,
And silent dreams each life weaves.
Trees stirred by a gentle breeze,
A bird's song shatters the peace.
Then quiet reigns once more,
Tranquility seeps in through an open door.
An endless blanket of the dark,
Covered by a million sparks,
A silent light is guiding the clouds,
Swept by the wind,as if clearing all doubts.
Wisps of smoke in the air,
Tended to,with loving care,
Carried away they are by a sudden gust,
A goodbye to familiarity,now a must
A landscape so silent,yet so serene,
And then the peaks on which the sky leans,
Are kissed by a rosy glow,
The clear dawn ,beautiful and slow.
2007-06-04 03:54:25 · update #2
It's really beautiful. I wrote my dad a poem when I was 9 years old and another when I was 18. I have been writing for years. I encourage you to keep it up. He will love it! Take care.
2007-06-04 00:12:31 · answer #1 · answered by curious_boricua_soul 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow that's amazing. Keep writing, you've got talent!
2007-06-04 08:16:47 · answer #2 · answered by orangegrrl55 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats one of the sweetist poems i have read in a while and your dad is soooo lucky to have someone like you to love him!
2007-06-04 08:54:57 · answer #3 · answered by momo 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It`s wonderful. I think u`r father will truly love it.u should write more of this kinds.
2007-06-04 06:19:53 · answer #4 · answered by riya 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i do poetry and most peoples poems suck, but lady you have talent go 4 it
2007-06-04 06:14:06 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
interesting in a good way
2007-06-04 09:04:35 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
(-: You've got a really lucky dad! I bet he'll love it!
2007-06-04 06:14:30 · answer #7 · answered by Madame M 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this one makes a daddy proud!
2007-06-04 06:18:50 · answer #8 · answered by 837 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋