love,
a simple enough word,
just four letters,
only a single syllable,
never thought it would be so hard,
such a simple word,
but so hard to say,
so hard to explain,
so hard to confess.
each time i look at you that word comes to mind,
but it never comes out,
afraid that you won't feel the same,
or that it isn't true
or that it will scare you away.
i am not sure if this love is true,
or if it is love at all,
but i wish i could say it to your face to see if you feel the same,
to see how you react,
but each time i open my mouth to say it,
i get tongue tied,
can't breathe,
and all i can do is stare in your eyes,
as you stare in mine,
and the world stops as we kiss.
is this love,
i don't know,
do you think it's love too,
i don't know,
but each time i look in your eyes,
each time we share a kiss,
or whenever you hold me close,
i wish for the moment to last forever,
and that scary four-letter word runs through my head.
2007-06-02 17:25:39 · 14 answers · asked by iANNA! 5 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
beautiful.
and to the ones who criticised it.......try writing a poem urself,its not really easy>>>>>>>>>>
2007-06-02 19:51:41 · answer #1 · answered by NATALIE 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This is definitely a good start! I would work on the flow of your poetry. But you promise to be an amazing poet with some practice! Let me know if you post any more poems!
2007-06-03 00:28:28 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow this is amazing! I like it alot. It explains alot. You also have a great descriptive writing, and beat. Keep up the good work!
2007-06-03 00:35:51 · answer #3 · answered by Midget 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Excellent.
It has rhythm and passion, and it flows. The repetitions are effective and the ideas move and build from beginning to end.
Keep writing. You show great promise.
2007-06-03 00:31:21 · answer #4 · answered by nightserf 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Cliche. It seems like a mish-mash of things other people have written -- or something from a Sweet Valley High book.
2007-06-03 00:27:54 · answer #5 · answered by Mickey Mouse Spears 7 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Fantastic, Awsome, Marvellous and Amazing, did you made the poem by yourself?? If do, your soo smart and i would pay $5 to hear that beautiful tune again!!!!!!!!:)
Keep it up:)
2007-06-03 00:49:01 · answer #6 · answered by @Be CGSFL ELMAS CENAFAN AK 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
nice. i like it. but i have a different opinion. love is easy to say. hard to explain. and easy to confess when you really dont love them. ordinary love is overrater and true love is underrated
2007-06-07 00:26:02 · answer #7 · answered by riaz4918 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW!!! I wish I could write that good!! That was AMAZING!!! Keep working and you will succeed even more!
2007-06-07 21:41:28 · answer #8 · answered by *luna's lover* 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sounds pretty corny and stupid to me why dont you just get it over with and tell the guy that you love him already instead of writing a stupid poem about it lol
2007-06-03 00:29:34 · answer #9 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 2⤋
nice very nice too
2007-06-03 01:18:42 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋