have written a story, and I want to add onto it. Does anyone have any ideas?
Here's the link to my story:
http://groups.google.com/group/the-ghost-of-you
2007-06-02 14:08:23 · 2 answers · asked by Ashley M 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
your story was alright but it had no voice. and i got lost real easy, maybe you should work on improving. its good though it could be better.
2007-06-02 14:28:26 · answer #1 · answered by Wendy G 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Let me start by saying I really like the idea. I haven't ever read anything like it. But, the grammar and sentence structure needs work. And it seems like all you are doing is telling. ____ is _____. You need to develop and actual story, not just tell what is going on. Pick who is telling the story, and stick with one person's point of view. Just develop more of a plot. But I really like the idea!
2007-06-02 14:38:30 · answer #2 · answered by Rachel H 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋