Story Ideas?

Question

I have written a story, and I want to add onto it. Does anyone have any ideas?

Here's the link to my story:
http://groups.google.com/group/the-ghost-of-you

Answer 1

Why not actually write the story rather than just put a rough draft of an idea? This story needs a LOT of polish before you can consider adding to it. Observe:

If your father was a rock star, he would write songs about you. Not
about the good things, but about the bad. Like all the trouble
you caused him. Little troubles, like being afraid of the dark and
so crawling into their bed when they were hoping to make love, like
wetting your bed, and crying all night as a baby because you didn't like
how it felt, and how little sleep they got because of it. Then again,
maybe they wouldn't even talk about you. Maybe they would pretend you
didn't exist at all, leaving you to suspect that they couldn't wait
until you're ready to move out. Maybe they would just pay anybody that
found out about you a lot of money to keep their mouth shut about you.
And maybe sometimes, when he thinks you're not looking, your dad talks
to your friends about what a brat you are, saying stuff that doesn't
even apply to you. That's when you know that he's really no different
from the image he has in his head of you. And maybe, just maybe, He
would destroy his own life while ruining yours by sabotaging the date
with the one you hope to be your soon-to-be bride or groom.

How do I know this? Because I am the daughter/son of ...[Introduce your
narrator here. Or better yet, cut this whole section and begin with the
characters you are going to use.]

But there was one rock star that was totally different from that,
a man named Joel Madden. Joel is the lead singer of Good Charlotte,
[a (whatever type of) band here in (the city or town of your choice).]
The lead guitarist is Joel's twin brother Benji. Other band members are
Billy Martin, our guitarist, who can make his Stratocaster sing or
weep on command. Paul Thomas, our blue eyed bassist, has a shock of black
hair and a touch so much like Genesis you would think he was on loan
from them. And there's Chris Wilson, our drummer, a 1st degree black belt
who can keep perfect time, but who couldn't hold onto a drumstick throughout
a show to save his life.

Joel is very loyal to his daughter. He gives her anything she wants
because his daughter is like gold to him.

[Okay, that's not a great way to treat gold. She would get spoiled quickly. Is that where you're headed?]
Joel is twenty- six and his daughter is half his age.

[WHOAH! He had her when he was 12??? Is that even possible? That would make him a VERY immature father. Are you sure you want to do that?]

His daughter's name is Ashley. Ashley feels the same about her father
as her father feels about her. Joel had Ashley a few years before Joel's
father left him on Christmas Eve, 1995 and Joel still doesn't give her
up when him and his family becomes homeless.

[Okay, this is getting less and less believable. You want to add to your story? FIX IT. That will add whole chapters. Trust me. Where is Ashley's mother? What happened to her? Why would Joel's father abandon him? How can Joel be anything BUT like his own parents? If Joel is homeless, how can he afford to start a band?]

Ashley understands what her father has gone thru to keep her alive
and she is very proud of her father because of that. Neither Ashley nor
Joel can imagine life without the other.

[You are telling way too much. Why aren't you showing any of this? I'm still waiting for the story to begin. Most people will not wait this long. You need to drag your reader in within a paragraph or two.]

But not until Easter, 2003, was when
Joel could not only imagine what life could be like without his daughter,
but he soon has to. It was Easter, 2003, and Ashley was running
away from her worst enemy.

[Okay, you haven't set ANY of this up yet! I don't care about the date. There's NO reason to repeat it. You shouldn't even include it at all. Why make your story obsolete?]
.
It was at least a month ago when Ashley's worst enemy kidnapped her
for a day. The kidnapped fooled Ashley and one of her friends of
seeing guitars at his car and pushed them into his car. He then
drove off and went to his house. Ashley called the police. But the sad
part of the police is that the police didn't take Ashley and her
friend to where the concert was. Ashley and her friend then had to
walk to where the concert was. Ashley's father was there the whole
time when his daughter was gone. Like I said, Joel can't imagine
what life could be like without his daughter.

[This is nonsensical, and way underdescribed. Who is this 'worst enemy'? Why would they kidnap her? Just this one statement could be spun into an entire story. Why cut it off this way? And why would the police release a child on her own anyway? None of this could happen in anything like a real world. To be honest, I lost interest at this point. But I did glance at the rest of the first segment, and noticed that it was VERY repetitive. The idea is to advance the STORY, not just multiply words. I would suggest that you just take what you have written above, and develop THAT into your story. There's plenty there for a novel. But you have to actually SHOW, not just tell. Good luck!]




Yeah, okay, here's my idea: the song is called
"Ghost of You" and the lyrics are:

I will wait until the end.
When the pendulum will swing back to the darker side
of our hearts bleeding.
I will save this empty space
next to me like its grave
where I lay a place for us to sleep
eternally together.
I have been searching for traces of what we were.
A ghost of you is all that I have left
of you to hold.
I wake in the night
to find there's no one there
but me
and nothing of what we were
at all.

So here I am pacing around this house again
with pictures of us living on these walls.
I see my breathe in the cold
of the air that I breathe
and I'm wondering, I'm wondering,
if its you that I feel,
if its you that I feel,
haunting me forever.
I have been searching for traces of what we were.
A ghost of you is all that I have left
of you to hold.
I wake in the night to find there's no one there
but me
and nothing of what we were
at all

and I'm not asking for any memories,
I only want to know you're here.
A ghost of you is all that I have left of you to hold.
I wake in the night to find there's no one there but me and
nothing of what we at all.
A ghost of you is all that I have left
of you to hold.
I wake in the night to find there's no one there
but me
and nothing of what we were
at all.

[Are you at all familiar with rhyme and meter? Try to keep about the same number of syllables in each parallel line of your verses.]

Answer 2

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Answer 3

add the end of the Republican party