Time is what we all lack
Foreget the past they say
Live for today and the future
Make the best of time we have
Bring forward all that you are
Don't cringe behind blinders
Stand up to your inner being
For only you stops yourself
Time comes and goes in life
Bring back your piece of mind
Take hold of time for it is yours
The whole of life is just ahead.
2007-06-02 09:09:55 · 17 answers · asked by Kei , 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
I like your positive view point that the poem conveys. Keep up the good work.
2007-06-02 09:13:34 · answer #1 · answered by Cinna 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful
2007-06-02 09:18:13 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
very good-dare l say--l would make it rhyme more- like Time is what we all lack,forget the past they say-
just look to the future,make the best of time today-- and so on-sorry-its your poem-so its up to you,thanks for letting us read it-love Jo x
2007-06-02 09:18:33 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its really good. I think ur a great writer. If u were a famous poem writer, i would go #1 for u!
2007-06-02 09:12:57 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Great ! Well written, but needs a little bit more rhyme.
2007-06-02 09:13:26 · answer #5 · answered by cajun24 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I really like it
I like it cause it is cool and true!
Keep writing ur doing GR8
2007-06-02 09:15:16 · answer #6 · answered by Springsteen 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think this is the drivel of a self-important egomaniac with no real problems.
Otherwise I loved it.
2007-06-02 09:12:40 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I'm no expert, it works for me. Use spell checker. Wouldn't catch "stops", should be "stop".
2007-06-02 09:16:32 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
cool i like it a lot i think you should make another one like that good job
2007-06-02 09:15:52 · answer #9 · answered by The great king 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Good Words, but it is not a poem because it doesn't rhyme.
2007-06-02 09:13:26 · answer #10 · answered by Kingston's Mommy 4 · 1⤊ 2⤋