“Black and tan” clubs were dance halls that catered to both black and white patrons and the Rooster was one of such that was frequented by Joe Louis while he was in town."
2007-06-02 09:05:21 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
Looks good but I'd make a few changes.....
I'd drop the words "of such."
If "Black and tan" is refering to the color of the dance halls then keep the "t" lower case. However I believe it's depicting the title of the dance halls so you should cap the "T" in Tan.
Also, breaking it up into two sentences and changing position of word "frequented" might make it read easier.
"Black and Tan" clubs were dance halls that catered to both black and white patrons. The Rooster was one that Joe Louis frequented while he was in town.
:-)
2007-06-02 09:20:18 · answer #1 · answered by Deneen 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes, it is correct, but if I were to be the one writing it, I would write it as such:
“Black and tan” clubs were dance halls that catered to both black and white patrons. The Rooster was one of such that was frequented by Joe Louis while he was in town."
2007-06-02 16:12:06 · answer #2 · answered by Heidi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"Black and tan" clubs were dance halls that catered to both back and white patrons. The Rooster was one such club that was frequented by Joe Louis during his visits to town.
2007-06-02 16:11:04 · answer #3 · answered by mryuk7262 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"'Black and tan' clubs were dance halls that catered to both black and white patrons, and 'The Rooster' was one of such that was frequented by Joe Louis while he was in town."
2007-06-02 16:13:21 · answer #4 · answered by Maus 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is correct. You could have made it better "sounding" by splitting it into two different sentences or using a comma after patrons, however the sentence would pass a grammar test, just the way it is.
2007-06-02 16:21:08 · answer #5 · answered by ROSE 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes. The sentence is a bit too long for my tastes. I would prefer a period after "patrons," removal of the word "and," and the next sentence beginning with "The." But length aside, there's nothing wrong with the structure (grammar) of the sentence.
2007-06-02 16:26:42 · answer #6 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would drop such of other wise it is correct
2007-06-02 16:28:48 · answer #7 · answered by govtagent_2001 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is "gramatically" correct, but it doesn't sound good because the sentence doesn't flow well. The sentence almost reads like a run on because it is so long.
2007-06-02 16:10:30 · answer #8 · answered by MFV 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋