I am writing a statement that I need to turn in for a grade. I know what I what to say just not how to word it. I don't like the way it is word but can't express a different way to put into word. please read and reword my statement below for me.
Yes, I would love to work at my classmate business because it a small well structure business that stresses interrelatedness and I believe a well adapted company with room to grow will grow and be around to advantage as well as retire from one day.
2007-06-01 02:39:09 · 3 answers · asked by love_to_please_my_man 1 in Business & Finance ➔ Other - Business & Finance
Yes, I would be very interested in working at my classmate's small business. His/Her business is well structured and has lots of opportunities for career growth. In addition, due to his/her focus on building co-worker personal relationships, I would very much like to retire from his/her business some day.
2007-06-01 04:17:31 · answer #1 · answered by wolf1ibm 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes, I would love to work at my classmate's business because it is a small, well structured company that stresses interrelatedness. I believe a well adapted company with room to grow will do so and be around to advance as well as retire strong.
2007-06-01 09:44:29 · answer #2 · answered by guess 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I can help you, but I won't do it for you. Here's a MAJOR tip. It is all one ginormous sentence. It needs periods, and commas. TIP #2. The first period goes after the word business. Reread that sentence and see how it sounds. Then proceed. LAST tip. The word because then may not be necessary. Good luck. There is an old proverb that is extremely important. "Give a man a fish, and you gave him a meal. Show him HOW TO FISH and you feed him for life." Good luck. You can do it.
2007-06-01 09:55:16 · answer #3 · answered by Dennis B 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋