MOMMY
4/30/07
MOMMY WHY DO YOU DO THIS
MOMMY WHY DO YOU MAKE ME CRY
MOMMY WHY WONT YOU HELP ME
YOU FLIP SIT BACK AND SIGH
YOUR WORDS HAVE BEEN THE ONLY KEEPING ME ALIVE
YOU PROMISED YOU WOULD SAVE ME
MOMMY WHATS WRONG
I OFTEN WONDER WHAT IT MAY BE
MOMMY PLEASE
NOT AGAIN
I DONT WANT TO GO THROUGH THIS
I THOUGHT WE PUT IT TO AN END
MOMMY I CRY AT NIGHT
AND ALSO WHILE I WRITE THIS
I LOVE YOU SO MUCH
AS I DO MY LITTLE SIS
MOMMY I THOUGHT YOU CHANGED
MOMMY I MISS YOU SO
IVE BEEN TORN INTO PEICES
EVER SINCE YOU MADE ME GO
MAYBE THIS IS FOR THE BEST
A BITTER SAD GOODBYE
OR MAYBE THIS IS JUST A TRIP
ANOTHER UNINTENTIONAL LIE
THERE YOU GO AGAIN
MAKING ME WORRY
MOMMY HOW DID IT COME TO THIS
ITS ALL SO BLURRY
MOMMY IM SORRY
FOR BEING YOUR MISTAKE
BUT YOUR REJECTIONS AT IT AGAIN
IM ALMOST READY TO BREAK
YOURE THE COOLEST MOM IN THE WORLD
MOMMY YOURE MY FAVORITE PERSON EVER
IT JUST HURTS ME
TO KNOW THAT NOW YOU DONT WANT TO BE TOGETHER
I WONDER WHY GOD
DOESNT LET EVERYONE HAVE A GOOD LIFE
ITS JUST NOT FAIR
WE HAVE SO MUCH STRIFE
MOMMY I WONDER WHAT THE FUTURE BRINGS
I WONDER IF YOULL EVER STOP
IT MAKES ME WANNA PICK UP A GUN
PUT IT TO MY HEAD AND LET IT POP
YOU CAN BE SO NICE
BUT CHANGE IN AN FLASH
RIGHT WHEN I DIDNT EXPECT IT
A PAINFUL EMOTIONAL LASH
MOMMY WHEN YOU CAME INTO MY LIFE AGAIN IT WAS GREAT
I THOUGHT WE WOULD STAY TOGETHER
YOU SAID YOUD SAVE ME FROM HERE
NOW YOU SAY NEVER
MOMMY I WISH I COULD GO BACK
I COULD HELP YOU WHEN YOU GOT HURT
ID PICK YOU UP WHEN YOU FELL OFF YOUR BIKE
AND WIPE OFF ALL THE DIRT
MOMMY WHY DO YOU CHANGE
THIS ISNT WHAT YOU SAID
RIGHT AFTER I START GETTING ALONG WITH DAD
YOU MAKE ME FEEL LIKE I WANNA BE DEAD
MOMMY KNOW THAT I LOVE YOU
MOMMY KNOW THAT I WOULD NEVER HURT YOU
MOMMY KNOW THAT I MISS YOU
MOMMY KNOW THAT ONCE YOU LOVED ME BACK
2007-05-31 18:48:32 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
it's very emotional.
a lot of feelings of being deceived, lied to.
like his/her feelings were toyed with and treated like an object.
however, maybe i'm not imaginative enough, but i can't figure out what the mom has been doing to the kid.
was the kid abused? was the kid a child from a rape?
or was the mom just mentally unstable and unintentionally made her child go through these traumas?
maybe u could reveal a lil on what the kid went through.
overall, it's nice. good job. (:
2007-05-31 18:56:27 · answer #1 · answered by Coin Soup 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very colorful and imaginative. This is actually not bad. Seriously, I'm not sucking up for some points, I really don't need them. I am usually very critical of so-called "poetry" posted here because it's very often really, really bad. I like your poem a lot. You have talent and a vocabulary and you know how to use it. Good job.
2016-05-18 02:33:56 · answer #2 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A very sad and frantic poem, I always wrote poetry when I was sad or frantic. It needs some editing, but your emotions really come across. I hope it did for you what writing poetry should; which is to express and deal with emotions.
2007-05-31 18:56:14 · answer #3 · answered by LodiTX 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow -- very good. One of the few poems that I actually thought was interesting to read. Although Freud would have a field day. Yes, this poem is his wet dream.
2007-05-31 18:52:56 · answer #4 · answered by Mickey Mouse Spears 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good. Fifth line could be edited to sound like 'Your words have but kept me alive'. Good poem! Do you write haiku as well? I love to write and read poems and haiku. Do share some more if you have any.
2007-06-01 00:35:51 · answer #5 · answered by Asia 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
0k so, nice poem..
it touched me..
but, are you okay?.. did you write this because its your feeling about your mom?..
what a melancholic/ phlegmatic girl..
2007-05-31 20:46:39 · answer #6 · answered by ô,ô 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Are you okay??? Do u need a shoulder to cry on???
but its okay. keeps you wondering.
2007-05-31 18:57:43 · answer #7 · answered by Bella 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋