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Sandshifter

Two lovers entangled, their bodies as one
Left in the embrace far detached from the sun
The poison ingested to kill and set free
Horrors and wonders, they have forever to see

The time that most people waste on this earth
A hard time believing, there lives have much worth
Who am I to judge , a mere mortal you might ask
My time spent with demons, I'm up to the task

Brimstone and fire and pain till time ends
I'm more than ecstatic, to hell, your souls i will send
The dead cannot dance or sing or converse
I'm sorry I have to tell you, your soul I did curse

As you scratch and you bang, on your home in a box
Try to remember, you're wasting your time, looking for clocks
The hounds who guard hell and keep you in line
misery and complete agony, your new friends for all time

2007-05-31 11:00:20 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities Poetry

10 answers

Nice work Steve,
This is well written
I am impressed
keep up the writing.

2007-05-31 11:43:18 · answer #1 · answered by sweet_blue 7 · 1 0

ALright, I feel so totally upstaged. This poem is so good, it makes me think about what we're actually capable of if we try.

P.S. this is actually 'STrathhavengirl', but my account was deleted for some odd reason. Get used to looking for my new account!

2007-05-31 11:21:29 · answer #2 · answered by future_writer_dreamer 2 · 0 0

An excellent poem that speaks of condemning. Very cool.

2007-05-31 13:47:50 · answer #3 · answered by shadowofu_love29 3 · 0 0

It's VERY NICE, except for this line:

''Try to remember, you're wasting your time, looking for clocks''

especially the ''clocks'' word. It has no place in this poem IMHO.

2007-05-31 12:21:57 · answer #4 · answered by just me 2 · 0 1

Really good. If only people would realize what they are capable of and that they do have choices.

2007-05-31 11:34:34 · answer #5 · answered by ace 3 · 0 0

Sounds like you had your brain in gear.

2007-05-31 11:14:40 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0 0

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AmoqZ1VGGg4YimHk_X9HlbTsy6IX?qid=20070529112300AAYki1d

id give it an 8 of 10 its pretty good i ought to say plz read my poem anybody and tell me what you think :)

2007-05-31 11:56:50 · answer #7 · answered by Chris 3 · 0 0

what is with all of these AMAZING poems!! you are truly talented

2007-06-01 03:36:36 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0 0

Try again!

2007-05-31 11:11:53 · answer #9 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 1 1

well i like it ^_^

2007-05-31 11:05:14 · answer #10 · answered by goldfish1679 3 · 0 0

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