POEM Help...?

Question

This poem is about self relience- it needs more figurative language and the rhyme scheme needs to be fixed. Can someone attempt to fix theese problems and others in the poem.

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"The Path of Life"

There are many paths in life to take
That lead you to places unknown
It is up to you to determine your fate,
Without someone else deciding your own.

Do not let persuasions of others overcome you,
Fight them off one by one;
Clear your thoughts and your mind,
Remember, you are the only one who can decide.

There may be times where you feel alone,
Like no one is on your side;
Echoes of other’s opinions scramble in your head,
But your true distinction will soon be shown.

When it comes to deciding on which path you take,
Your mind is already made up;
Even if your path is different from the rest,
You will have confidence in your decision,
Knowing it was your own and the best.

Answer 1

"The Path of Life"

There are many paths in life to take
That lead you to places unknown
You alone determine fate,
Someone else can’t decide your own.

Persuasions of others can blind,
Fight the blocks off one by one;
Clear your thoughts and your mind,
And your true self will soon be shown.

There may be times where you feel misled,
Where no one is on your side;
Echoes of opinions dance in your head,
But your distinction will provide.

When it comes to making your own chioce,
Though it may differ from the rest,
Show confidence in your decision, rejoice
Knowing it was your own and your best.