Little Ones?

Question

With a trust so complete
And a love so full,
Little ones show life
In a new view.

Little hands to hold,
Little eyes that shine,
Everything is brand new
And all comes alive.

Flowers become a crown,
And sheets a cape;
A branch becomes a sword,
And trees a lively escape.

All too soon
Flowers and sheets,
Trees and branches
Are seen just as these.

Trust and love
Still abide,
Though littleness
Has gone goodbye.

Answer 1

I really like the idea behind the poem; the imagery of flowers as a crown, sheets as a cape, etc. is just lovely. It is the meter and rhyme scheme that sort of ruins it for me. Have you tried putting these lovely thoughts into a free-verse poem, rather than trying to rhyme each stanza?

Answer 2

S'beautiful!
Very good!
:)
kara