does this poem make sense?

Question

does this make sense? tell me the truth please because im not much of a writter

autumn leaves.

Autumn leaves fall like thoughtless feelings, they dont care where they fall or what tree they hang from. The autumn winds sway them and give them the life they need. the wind whispers a blissful song as they dance in a awying agreement. They dont have a care in the world, they sit swaying waiting for the wind to set them free. They take a chance and let go with out being able to look back, they sail along the streets as the wind guides them to places!

Answer 1

Yes, it makes sense. It shows agoods imaginationand expressive use of words, I imagine "awying" in line 3 is a typo. How would U set it out like a poem, though?

Answer 2

Sure honey you poem makes a whole lot of sense, sounds like someone is in some pain and this is a good way to release it. Poems rhyme, haiku, etc.but in paragraph form you can`t put down on paper u really feel inside. ( I`m not a critic but maybe I can Help, only if u want. >AUTUMN LEAVES< Leaves falling like my feelings of despair, falling to the ground w/my pain still there. The seasons change, the winds blow, but during this time, (does he,she)remember what I know. The very first time I saw that Autumn leaf fall, memories of you were all that i saw. The winds blew stronger and harder too,making me feel you were leaving me and taking your feelings too. Not once did that tree stand still in the wind or the leaves stop falling, you left me wondering, could you ever come back for me again? So what I read from yours helped me to write this, I hope you like it, surely u r a ,very loving person, ,

Answer 3

I really like it! The only thing is that you should put it in poetry form -- if perhaps you're unsure how to do that you can look it up on the internet, or just rent some poetry books from the library.

But I thought it was really good and I liked what it was about a lot. I think you should keep writing...the more poetry you read, the more "poetic" your mind will be...which helps when you write. And you DON'T have to rhyme, although many people find that more appealing. You can do whatever you want! (-=

I thought it was good -- write more!

Answer 4

What are the Clouds but,
an excuse for the sky?
What is Life but,
an escape from death?

your's is good.
how 'bout mine?

Edit:
xyz..thats what they call a Free Verse.It is even better than End-Rhymes..

Answer 5

Do tell...What are thoughtless feelings?
The poem lacks rhythm

Answer 6

i like it.^_^

i felt the hotness of autumn and the gentle wind of grief and freedom touching my heart like hot snows that only love can see...

keep up the good work.^_^

Answer 7

this is boring, make it rhyme at least

autumn leaves are slowly falling, that time of year as if the ground is calling........etc

Answer 8

The intention and the content is good!
everything else... stinks! sorry..