i have to have between 15 and 21 lines .2 sound devices 3 words of imagery and one figurative language.
School days
Are almost done
Friends will be missed One by one
The good times
Will always be here
Even if
Were far or near
Well grow and grow
Like a tree
Just you guys
Wait and see
Keep moving forward
But don't forget the past
The friends, the teachers
And each and every class
2007-05-28 07:20:25 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
can u help me add imagery and mysound devices
2007-05-28 07:35:36 · update #1
The poem is very nice, but you need to work on the sound devices and the imagery.
Also, there are typos:
We're (not were)
We'll (not well)
2007-05-28 07:26:55 · answer #1 · answered by Beach Saint 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this is very nice poem about the end of the school days. the theme of oyur poem is universal. every student will miss a memory of himself/herself. imagery is not very well-contructed. actually I can not see any imagery here. insted of "the good days" try to use something different. so you will have a sound device after that. you can enhance the third stanza. add more words. for exaple.
like a tree with brachs
every goes for different ways
but the root is the same
commen days they have
2007-05-28 14:52:16 · answer #2 · answered by muhammet gunduz 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
School days
Are almost done
What will I do? Where will I run?
Sometimes adding a question in a poem is helpful because it forces the reader to think about the answers as they read your poem. Can people read a poem and think about answers at the same time? Hmmm??? Word.
2007-05-28 16:02:46 · answer #3 · answered by leesa 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OK...you're close... As for sound devices, take the imagery of the tree, for example, and liken the sound of the tree, whether it be wind or the birds that inhabit it, to your friends and the sounds they make. Just a suggestion...
As for imagery...Try describing summer without describing summer...or try describing school without describing school. Sounds tricky, I know...this is why serious poetry is hard.
Good luck...Keep writing!
2007-05-28 15:39:13 · answer #4 · answered by Barrett 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Two Thumbs way up, and I give you a star.
This is great, wonderful. Patent this, and it will go far.
Have a nice day.
2007-05-28 14:24:04 · answer #5 · answered by That one 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Were should be we're
Well should be we'll
But the rest is good! Nice work.
2007-05-28 14:23:16 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
is this supposed to be like the song Graduation by vitamin c?
2007-05-28 14:29:20 · answer #7 · answered by Celia 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋