what do u think about poem?

Question

Remove Your Strangling Shoes

Remove your strangling shoes
Strike an end to the corny blues
And alight on the watery grass
That soaks away everything false
And gives you the spongy calm
With its starchy balm

Remove your conventional gloves
Concealing treasure- the bags of thugs
Slip you hands into the vacuum of the air
And let go the reigns of dead care
Alight on the wild reign less horse
And spring in to feel life’s source

Set aside your choking necklace
The diamond menace
That filters out the light of the day
Sends it down to the darkest cave
Where it was born-
The black disguised devil’s song

Feel the squashed grass underneath
That bleeds to make you breathe
Look at the white air around you
That gets pierced to make you pass through
And the diamond necklace you wear
Uproots the grass and chokes the air
All your cruel, unfeeling vanity fare

Answer 1

Heavy.

For some reason the use of the word "alight" bothers me, perhaps because the poem is so dark.

Also, the straps on a horse are called "reins." And I'm confused by what the preceding line: "And let go the reigns of dead care" is supposed to mean.

However, I think you are on to something. Keep up the good work.

Answer 2

I thought it was alright. I don't know anything about poetry though. But when I read it, it had a nice flow to it.

Answer 3

it's a great poem, just not something i'd sit at home to read. I like funny poems...but still, this poem is great! (good vocab.) :)