Listen to my poem about feelings
vapid pink potatoe peelings
sophist scraps that leave my wretch id cold, afraid
watch in wincing facination
writhing naked worms of angst parade
2007-05-26 10:00:15 · 5 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Sorry about the big words Elaine. You might want to try the juniors section.
2007-05-26 11:12:52 · update #1
To the comments about grammatical error. I guess if you looked at Guernica you would say "that doesn`t look like a horse". Spelling of facination and potatoe specificaly to draw the pedants out of the woodwork.
2007-05-26 20:03:52 · update #2
Ha there you go again, go on say it, I`m ready.
2007-05-26 20:05:54 · update #3
I have to ask what you are reading as far as poetry goes?
This thing's very manic and the lack of proper grammar and punctuation is adding to that mania.
2007-05-26 11:58:18 · answer #1 · answered by DreamyH 2 · 4⤊ 0⤋
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2016-10-06 02:33:43 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is not a poem. You're trying to use big words, but they have no meaning in your context. The imagery does not relate to anything at all. You've made grammatical errors.
2007-05-26 10:08:49 · answer #3 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 3⤊ 1⤋
its ok a long time ago i wrote a poem like this
name
who likes pizza
who is afraid of heights
who loves to play basketball
last name
2007-05-26 10:04:16 · answer #4 · answered by ipod :) 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
HA! Wretch id.
2007-05-26 10:07:45 · answer #5 · answered by shmux 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋