I wrote a narrative yesterday and would you critique it?

Question

I really don't know how to write a narrative... I kind of just winged it.... and add some info on how to write a "proper narrative"!

The night was cold and motionless
As I waited for him
His words echo in my mind
"12 midnight, my love"
So I wait
With frozen hands and feet
Hoping to see his face this last time
For the enemy soldiers are close
I feel their presence
Running
Never turning back
The trees give no path
Scratched by a branch
I bleed yet I do not feel
Was I to be lost
So he might live
I was betrayed
His love was false
Never again
Running through the wood
I was the fool
Lost and nieve

Answer 1

This is not a narrative poem. It's something you've invented, but that was not your assignment. Motivation is missing. Antecedents are confusing or nonexistent, and your ending is incomprehensible. Read the rules for narrative poetry, trash this one, and try again.

Answer 2

Sorry to say, but that is not a true narrative.
Narrative poetry is poetry that tells a story. In its broadest sense, it includes epic poetry; some would reserve the name narrative poetry for works on a smaller scale and generally with more direct appeal to human interest than the epic.

Narrative poetry is among the oldest, and perhaps the oldest, genre of poetry. Many scholars of Homer, from Quintus Smyrnaeus forward, have concluded that his tales of the Iliad and Odyssey were composed from compilations of shorter narrative poems that related individual episodes, and which were more suitable for an evening's entertainment.

Some narrative poetry takes the form of a novel in verse. An example of this is The Ring and the Book by Robert Browning. In terms of narrative poetry, a romance is a narrative poem that tells a story of chivalry. Examples include the Romance of the Rose or Tennyson's Idylls of the King. Although these examples use medieval and Arthurian materials, romances may also tell stories from classical mythology.