Does anyone like this poem?

Question

Our Mommy Tiger

Our mom is looks beautiful and sleek,
but she is actually quite powerful,
and certainly not weak.
Laying in the grass,
for an afternoon snooze,
All of a sudden, up and about,
there's a bug on her back, and on for a cruise.
There's a lion in site!
Run! Run! Run!
Us cubs are hiding, well, in fright...
The danger's gone by.
Wait! Something looks as big as a couch...
Our mom has scented something.
We're all down in a crouch.
You can see a really big thing,
and our mom crouches forward,
and she springs on a prey!
It was an antelope, and it was yummy!
We eat a lot, in a whole day,
and a hour later,
we go for a swim.
We get splashed and soaked all over!
Later on, we jump on a low tree limb,
and then we go out exploring!
Evening has come,
so it's time for one last meal.
We prowl after a deer, and then we pounce,
without even a squeal.
Now we're exhausted and tired,
after a long day's play.
We walk back home,
onto our beds to fall away,
into welcoming dreams...
That we'll be

(continued)
strong like our mom someday...
By the 2 Siberian Tiger cubs,
Daisy and Tommy

(me) :D Hope you like it! :D

Yeah, I know that it's a little off, but oh well. One thing, the reason I put "couch" in there is mainly because when I did a rough draft, I had to try to make it rhyme, but still, some parts are off... :(

Oh, and I am a kid... :D

Oooops! I made a mistake. :( There isn't supposed to be an "is" in the first sentence. Oh well.

Answer 1

Um yeah no. I don't believe that's true. What that one person Elaine wrote. I think anything that is written from the heart is poetic. It doesn't even have to be in any form, just write when it comes to you and that's all you really can do.

Answer 2

It is cute and seems to be aimed toward children. It's flow is a little off but in general a nice poem. My only real question is why the couch reference. Yes children would be able to recognize the size of the object in question by the couch reference but you made the reference through the tiger cubs eyes, a couch would not fit in their environment.

Answer 3

This is not a poem. Go to the library. Check out some books of poems and on poems. Do it for a few years. Then try to write a poem. Writing words down in poetic form does not a poem make.

Answer 4

It's good, but I wouldn't want it to be posted on anything as a serious poem, I think the content and connection to the reader could use some more work. The best poetry are ones that are relatable--unless they're for children.

Answer 5

I like it... don't listen to anyone else, write what you know, write what you are passionate about, from the heart.. keep it up