I have to try one more poem.?

Question

I snuck into the house at six
Just 14 you know the type
Smarter than I thought I was
Dumber than a bunch of sticks

Been out all nite drinkin beer
Egged on by friends who really wearn't
Lookin for a beatin for sure
The lights came on, I stopped like a deer

My dad who knew i was too drunk
said go to bed we'll talk at lunch
I stumbled like a sailor bum
My breath so bad i knew it stunk

When finally we had our talk
My dad not mad, laughed a bunch
He said that he had done the same
If I did it again, Id eat a punch

Answer 1

Sorry Steve, not your best work. I realize you're like, pretty old (at least compared to me) but I think it's been a while since this has happened to you. If I came home drunk, my parents wouldn't put it of.. It'd be more like:

We both knew that I'd drunk too much,
My ears ringing with booze.
Someone had spiked the punch,
but I wasn't the only one to lose.

My father screamed and my mother awoke,
they dosed me up with vitamin C.
My dad waved at me, a rum and coke.
My dad turned on the blender, against my desperate plea.

ok, so its not up to the usual standards, but it'd b much closer to my real thing.

Answer 2

Not bad. Did you learn your lesson after the first discussion or did it take a fist sandwich?

Answer 3

Ha! Someone just called you old! A bit choppy, sounds like a distant memory...