power
you think of power
I think of desperate men
homeless cold laughing
Lies
truth is hard to tell
when lies are all around you
new truth tomorrow
cats
possessive white cat
staring at a small brown rat
time for rat to die
heart
beating deep inside
just between the two of us
candle light shadows
2007-05-24 12:32:47 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Interesting....
And I thought I was nuts for thinking in iambic pentameter....
Haiku would drive me nuts
2007-05-24 12:53:37 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Traditional haiku is actually a little more complex than what you're doing here. These are closer to Senryu. I get the sense you're not really interested in critiques, though. It's good to see you having fun with poetry. You're very productive.
2007-05-24 20:52:48 · answer #2 · answered by Epistomolus 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
These are not Haiku. These are Senryu, at best.
If you would like information on Haiku go here:
http://www.thehaikupoet.com/
I recommend the essay by the late (and great) Keiko Imaoka.
2007-05-25 11:04:21 · answer #3 · answered by Dancing Bee 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Stop writing these things
You make everyone wish for death
To relieve their pain
2007-05-24 19:41:32 · answer #4 · answered by ultrasolvent 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
anybody can
write haiku all day and night
it is too easy
2007-05-24 19:40:26 · answer #5 · answered by Mr. Taco 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
As always, amazing.
2007-05-24 19:39:55 · answer #6 · answered by shadowofu_love29 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋