Is this grammatically correct? If not, please fix. Thank you!?

Question

I trust this proposal meets with your approval. Therefore, please indicate your authorization by returning a signed copy, along with the required deposit, to our office.

Answer 1

Its okay the way it is I believe it sounds more correct without therefore

Answer 2

I'd lose the word "therefore."

And reword the sentence so you don't have the awkward commas:

Please indicate your authorization by returning to our office a signed copy along with the required deposit.

Answer 3

It's fine but what do you think about this: I trust this proposal meets with your approval. If the terms are acceptable, please provide your authorization by returning a signed copy along with the required deposit to our office.

Answer 4

Try:

I trust this proposal meets your approval, and if so, please indicate your authorization by returning a signed copy and required depost to our office.

Answer 5

Looks good to me. I'm no English major though, I just go by what sounds correct.

Answer 6

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Answer 7

remove the word Therefore

Answer 8

I agree with the gentleman above - remove therefore.
[ 'Therefore' is a conclusion reached after a persuasive presentation. ]

Answer 9

Fine.

Answer 10

sounds good to me