Head held in my hands
tilted back her neck exposed
Jugular I need
2007-05-23 14:06:40 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
jaja,
Thanks for the vote of confidence. Ididn't know it was so rigid in here on wednesday night. But to make all you traditionalist happy, I do a traditional one.
2007-05-23 14:22:14 · update #1
It's brilliant. And i'm gald that you weren't afraid to post something like this.
Poetry isn't just about nature, it can be about anything. Death, nature, sadness, depression, anger, abuse, etc. And in your case, you chose the topic "vampires" lol
its good and "Exposed" and "jugular" are good word choices.
2007-05-23 14:18:41 · answer #1 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You know... traditionally in Haiku, there is no reference to the person writing the poem.
For instance:
White beautiful skin
Marred by twin bloodied bite marks
Growing cold, so cold
(Keeping with your vampire theme... though traditionally Haiku is also more about plants and nature and things)
But then again, I suppose you can do whatever you want!
2007-05-23 21:17:18 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good but not a haiku. Traditional haiku refers to seasons. What you wrote is a senryu. Really good though.
2007-05-23 22:37:48 · answer #3 · answered by jodapoet 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Aren't vampires a part of nature! I like the vampires! Another great poem, by the way.
2007-05-23 21:42:19 · answer #4 · answered by shadowofu_love29 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Umm....the normal haiku is about nature, not satanic "vampires."
2007-05-23 21:14:21 · answer #5 · answered by true_wahoo 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very vampirey :)
2007-05-23 21:12:11 · answer #6 · answered by HP Wombat 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋