how can i make this statment better?

Question

PERSONAL PROFILE
Highly motivated humanities graduate with placement experience in laboratory work. I am an effective persone who is confident and quick to learn.I appreciate team work and thrive for new opportunities to acquire knowledge and experience. I enjoy dealing with people of other nationalities and those of different cultural and social backgrounds.

Answer 1

First, use spell check and ask another person to proof read.
"Persone" is spelled "person." Avoid "I enjoy dealing with ..." It sounds negative, that you are forced to do that. Try, "I enjoy learning and sharing ideas and information with people from all cultures." Cultures can mean everyone. Or, you could just say, "I enjoy learning and sharing ideas and information with people."

Answer 2

Highly motivated humanities graduate with placement experience in laboratory work. I am an effective person who is confident and quick to learn. I enjoy opportunities to work in teams and thrive new opportunities so as to acquire knowledge and experience. I enjoy meeting people of other nationalities and those of different cultural and social backgrounds to my own.

Answer 3

I am a highly motivated humanities graduate with placement experience in laboratory work. I am a quick learner and am effective in my work. I enjoy and thrive in team work and am enthusiastic about acquiring new knowledge and experiences. I enjoy working (meeting) with people of diverse nationalities, cultures and social backgrounds.

I hope this helps.

Answer 4

Everyone else has covered your typo, but I would recommend switching up your action verbs as well. I am a YEAR humanites graduate of X College, with ((extensive?) don't lie, but if it's true add that) experience in laboratory work. I enjoy working in team environments, especially when working with a diverse group of colleagues. I am seeking challenging work that will allow me to expand my knowledge and look forward to new experiences. Note: it would be a little helpful to know what you're applying for....but I hope this helps - are you applying to grad school?

Answer 5

I am a confident and motivated graduate from the College of ______ at____ University. I enjoy acquring knowledge and gaining new experiences, especially when meeting new people.

It sounds more professional and less wordy. You need something that drives your point without saying too much.

Answer 6

First of all, drop the "e" from the end of "person".