Do you think this is a good poem?

Question

This is how it goes:


I just returned from vacation, to realize that its time for me to move on with my life.

I've liked this guy for a few years already but he loved someone else. I can't say I really loved him because I didn't, it was more that I like him. He knew the truth, but I didn't care.

I tried and tried to forget about him but couldn't. Finally I realized that I needed to get out of this place and go somewhere. Somewhere far far away. I flew to an island smaller then the island of Rhode Island where I stayed a few days.

There I realized that I am so lame which is a shame because someday my prince is going to come maybe not now, but one day.

Answer 1

I think this poem is good but is has no depth. Poem speak of what you feel inside with big words, sometimes it's rather cheeze others it's verry posonite and moving. Your poem is more telling a short story not telling us all how you feel. So try to just a dd a little depth to your poem. But overall it is good!

Answer 2

No poetry in there to my mind.

No visual imagery. I found four short paragraphs written by a young woman about a relationship that never was.

I think she needed an outlet for her powerful passion over this fellow and these are the words that poured out. They are fine, but it just ain't poetry babe.

Answer 3

No. It's terrible. It sounds like something a teenage Hollywood starlet would say to their uninterested and equally shallow friend.

Answer 4

Its wonderful...full of feelings... but try to put some figurative speeches to give more feelings to it...

Answer 5

lol! you buddy don't know whatu writn' 'bout? 'tis no poem. 'tis call' an intimate missive o' love letter!!