Maxie Limerick
Our poor little Yorkie is Max
He coughes and wheezes and hacks.
Max soon will be dead
I'll go out of my head
Oh, my poor little Max!! :(
2007-05-21 13:18:59 · 18 answers · asked by Books books books! 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Now I'm all teary eyed!
2007-05-21 13:22:23 · answer #1 · answered by a_r_cool321 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
First line: "is" is not necessary and takes away from the meat.
Last line: I would add "Yorkie" for rhythm. The last line is missing a beat without it.
"Oh, my poor little yorkie, Max"
Try giving it a read with that and you will see what I mean.
That being said. This seems complete and quite sad. It has a morbid sort of, "Ring Around the Rosies" feel to it. Makes me think of Oliver Twist or something of the sort. Quite good actually.
2007-05-22 17:57:09 · answer #2 · answered by SelfnoSelf 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Get Max to the vet immediately. Poor little Max.
2007-05-29 08:20:03 · answer #3 · answered by barbwire 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's cute and sad. Poor Max.
2007-05-29 13:05:26 · answer #4 · answered by eizus28 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
YES! But maybe that's because my dog is named Max and is on his doggie deathbed too. He's a Bichon. : ) 17 years old . . . I keep telling him to go towards the light, but he won't listen. Maybe because he's deaf . . . Well, he is blind too, so maybe he can't even see the light . . .
2007-05-29 12:27:21 · answer #5 · answered by sir_didymus24 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes, I do but it makes me sad I ♥ Yorkies
It reminds me of the time my father ran over my little cricket she was a Pomeranian :''o(
♥
: ^)
2007-05-29 09:00:45 · answer #6 · answered by ? 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awe, lol, "wheezes and hacks"
thats messed up!
2007-05-21 13:22:50 · answer #7 · answered by ξℓ Çђαηφσ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very creative, and a little sad :(
Thank you though, I loved it :)
2007-05-29 12:58:57 · answer #8 · answered by babyi'melectricc. 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Look for a new hobby
2007-05-28 13:48:36 · answer #9 · answered by Debbie 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
So sorry, no it depresses me, I love animals.
2007-05-29 12:17:27 · answer #10 · answered by Sue W 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋