i have written a poem and would like anyone and everyone please to send it to everyone they know i want it to go world wide but say it was written by Pastinie. please no plaguarism because i wrote this myself.
Do you enjoy the hills and the trees?
The beautiful views with a warming breeze.
When the leaves swirl round in different places,
While the dust fills out all the odd spaces.
Between the trees to the past,
Who knows what will and won’t last?
Among the meadows there grows a flower,
It is very rare and holds a great power.
Seams of joy grow in the ground,
Finding their way so they will be found.
As we walk through valleys and hills,
Show everyone our wonderful skills.
We show the world the meaning of joy,
You act as though you are a little boy,
Finding all the hidden spots,
Investigating every tiny dot.
Creating a fact that will never be lost,
Such a great thing that it has no cost,
The bonds between family members,
The love that will always be remembered.
2007-05-21 05:31:40 · 7 answers · asked by Pastinie 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
sorry i cant choose which one is best i will leave it to the voters.
2007-05-23 05:43:37 · update #1
That is very beautiful.I hope it go,s around the world as you wish.I will do my best to forward it.
2007-05-21 05:43:39 · answer #1 · answered by ? 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
"Constructive criticism is about finding something good and positive to soften the blow to the real critique of what really went on." --Paula Abdul
I love the sentiment you are trying to express; however, I think it needs a little more work.
2007-05-21 12:42:15 · answer #2 · answered by Beach Saint 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Nice poem! Good job ^^ keep going girl
2007-05-21 12:37:43 · answer #3 · answered by iFu 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Nice and positive, good to see
2007-05-25 08:26:06 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it your wonderful you should post it -email mesome of your poems at (jamaicanchick4lyfe@yahoo.com)
2007-05-21 12:41:04 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very well, I will do as you ask. Peace to you Pastinie.
2007-05-21 15:04:46 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
that is a really good poem
2007-05-21 12:39:21 · answer #7 · answered by ♥Hali♥ 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋