can u proof read this:?

Question

I was sitting on the hammock outside, thinking of something to do. I turned on the radio, “80 degrees and sunny today,” what gorgeous day going to waste, I thought. Although it was only 2’oclock, I was already done with my homework and chores, and pretty much bored to death.
The phone rang, “I’ll get it,” I shouted, unsure if anyone even heard.
I ran inside, and glanced at the Caller ID, and saw that my friend, Kylie was calling.
“Hey, you free?” she asked. It sounded like, she was pretty bored too.
“Oh my god, yes, I’ve been bored all day!”
After a few minutes of talking, we both decided that we should meet up, in the middle of Chase Farms, a near-by sub-division, and ride are bikes to Guernsey’s, a famous ice cream shop a few miles away. This was perfect; I finally had something exciting to do.
I got my bike and headed to Chase Farms. The scorching sun was beating down on me, and I was glad we planed for ice cream. Soon, I saw Kylie.
“Wow, this is gonna be great,” she

said. I couldn’t have agreed more.
Neither of us knew exactly how to get to Guernsey’s, but a few of my neighbors told me how they got there last summer. I hoped they were right.
Together we rode to the 8 mile entrance of Chase Farms, and from what I knew if we took the sidewalk that came on the right, in around five minutes, we should be there.
We continued on the sidewalk, talking and laughing the whole way. The path was surrounded by trees and flowers that only let spots of the sun, shine threw. I never knew there was such a beautiful place so close to my house.
“Watch out!!” I yelled. Too late, Kylie already ran into a tree, and stupid me, I didn’t stop, and now we were both on the ground, in hysterics.
We got up, pretty much slap-happy, and continued on the sidewalk for only a few seconds, before the sidewalk ended.
“Whoa. Is this supposed to happen?” Kylie asked.
Instead of ending in front of Guernsey’s, the sidewalk ended in fro

front of Guernsey’s, the sidewalk ended in front of what seemed to be an old tool shop, or maybe people started to build the place, but stopped. Whatever it was, we were unsure if we should still continue our adventure. There were bricks and nails all over the floor, and the place was extremely dusty. It seemed as though nobody had been here for quite awhile.
After looking around, in the midst of the silence, Kylie said, “We’re in the wild wild west of Novi.”
That made me laugh, and I assumed it meant we were going to find our way to Guernsey’s.
We rode our bikes a little further, around the bricks and nails, and stopped at a hill that was only about 3 feet high, but it was so steep, that we questioned if we could actually climb up. Across the hill, we could see the billboard that was close to Guernsey’s. The small hill continued horizontally, and along the top, was a railroad track.
We left our bikes by a near-by tree, and started climbing the hill. There were only

patches of grass, and my feet kept slipping. Flip-flops weren’t the best choice of shoes. Once we were at the top, we were practically standing on top of the railroad tracks. I defiantly didn’t feel safe.
Right across from us was another hill. The only way we could get to Guernsey’s was if we walked threw the tiny valley. To our bad luck, in the valley created by the two hills, was a small river.
“I think it ends over there.” Kylie said, as she pointed.
She was right. They river ended around 50 yards away. We were about to walk on the railroad track, but not wanting to take the chance of getting hit by a train, we came down, and walked alongside the hill until we thought the water ended, and climbed back up.
This time, water wasn’t stopping us from reaching the other side, so we were finally next to the road! Along the road was another sidewalk. We continued on the sidewalk towards the billboard, and soon enough we arrived at Guernsey’s!

Answer 1

Well, I think your whole story doesn't come up. But for starters, it's 2 o'clock, apostrophe after the O, not the 2. And the sentence that starts with "After a few minutes" is a run-on sentence. You need to make it a few sentences, not just one. "Nearby" does not need a hyphen. It's planned, not planed. And you left out the 'a' in What a gorgeous day going to waste. That's all I got time for.

Answer 2

There are grammar mistakes and you need to describe, not tell. Also, I don't understand how a sunny day could be "going to waste"... the main character was free of work, so shouldn't she be happy to relax? Other than that, good job!

I'll edit your first paragraph so that you see what I mean:

Soporifically lying on my hammock, I was surrounded by the beauty of nature. The sun illuminated a possee of dandylions as I was pondering ideas of what I could do. I clicked the radio on and a deep voice announced that today would be “80 degrees and sunny”.
"What a gorgeous day gone to waste," I thought.
I already completed my homework and chores, so there was nothing to do. I glanced at my shiny digital watch. It was only two o'clock.

Answer 3

This looks fine to me. I used to live in MI near Chase Farms. I could relate to all of the places that you mentioned.

Answer 4

in beginning you are missing a few spaces/quotation marks, but except that its all good!