soul
i was go on mute
mute coused waiting w/ hopeness
mute coused faithful love
in from bottom of my heart
i was die long time a go
die on pride
die on glory of love
it's killing me so slowly
i was pass way
w/ blood on all my body
blood from hurt heart
blood from sorrowfully
blood from hateness
oh my soul..
couse u....... i life
couse u too.... i die
2007-05-19 23:03:16 · 4 answers · asked by selalu 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
its a nice poem on how to make poetry a little asymmetrical
2007-05-19 23:38:11 · answer #1 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Cause you...I live not couse you... I life
know the past, future, and present tense.
But I like your poem... It's like the author is suffering from the time you start to live 'til death... :)
2007-05-20 01:13:17 · answer #2 · answered by airflare 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is sad and hopeless. I would like to see you compose something bright and strong and full of hope and energy and love and strength..You go, boy!
2007-05-20 04:15:55 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats very good. but are you trying to spell cause? just askin'
2007-05-19 23:06:25 · answer #4 · answered by BrownEyedMuggle 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋