BRAIN FART! Can someone please help me reword this paragraph so it sounds better?

Question

Here it is, i keep rewording it and rearanging it and it just doesn't seem right, please help me!

"Susan Griffin’s “Our Secret” discusses many different life themes. One such theme, denial, is found throughout many references in her essay. Griffin addresses the complexities of denial from several perspectives. One is how she draws a connection between the denial of self and responsibility to both authority and society, as well as how denial is a form of self preservation. Through all of these perspectives Griffin makes the point that to participate in denial, is to deny the self."

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uh rvn? hello homework help section!

"Our Secret" is an essay included in an anthology and according to MLA format the title of a small work within a larger work is to be put in quotation marks, not underlined

Answer 1

Susan Griffin's "Our Secret" is a work that incorporates many different themes. One such theme, denial, is found in the many references in her essay. She addresses the complexities of denial from several different perspectives. For example, Griffin makes the connection between the denial of self and the responsibilities to authority and society.She also illustratrates how denial can be a form of self-preservation. Through all the perspectives that Griffin uses she makes the point that to participate in denial is to deny yourself. (hope this helped)

Answer 2

"Susan Griffin’s “Our Secret” discusses many different life themes. One such theme dealing with denial is found throughout her essay. Griffin addresses the complexities of denial from several perspectives. She draws a connection between the denial of self and responsibility to both authority and society, as well as how denial is a form of self preservation. Through all of these perspectives she makes the correlation that to participate in denial is to deny the self."

Answer 3

I hope this helps.

"Susan Griffin’s “Our Secret” discusses many different life themes. One such theme, denial, is referenced throughout her essay. Griffin addresses the complexities of denial from several perspectives. One is how she draws a connection between the denial of self and responsibility to both authority and society, another is how denial is a form of self preservation. These perspectives reveal Griffin believes that to participate in denial, is to deny the self."

Answer 4

Susan Griffin's article, Our Secret, (underlined, no " ") discusses many different life themes; one such theme, denial, is found throughout many references in her essay. Griffin addresses the complexities of denial from different (since you are only mentioning two) perspectives; how she draws a connection between the denial of self and responsibility to both authority and society, and how denial is a form of self preservation. Through these perspectives, Griffen makes the point to participate in denial, is to deny the self. (remove the word "that". It's a filler word and clogs the flow of the paragraph.) Hope this helps.

Answer 5

Susan Griffin’s “Our Secret” discusses many different life themes. Denial, one of them, is found throughout many references in her essay. Griffin addresses the complexities of denial from several perspectives, from how denial is a form of self preservation, to how she draws a connection between the denial of self and her responsibility to both authority and society. Through all of these perspectives Griffin makes the point that to participate in denial, is to deny the self."

Answer 6

Susan Griffin's 'Our Secret' discusses many different themes of life. One such theme is that of denial. This is found throughout many references in her essay. (Then give examples of where it is found in the essay.)
Griffin addresses the complexities of denial from several different perspectives. One example of this is how she draws a connection between the denial of self and the denial of responsibility. (How does she do this?) This is seen with her different views of society and authority.
Another example of this is how denial is used as a form of self preservation.
Through all of these perspectives Griffin makes the point that to participate in denial is to deny one's self. (This is a good conclusion sentence.)

Answer 7

Sounds fine to me. Maybe combine the first sentences.

"Susan Griffin’s “Our Secret” discusses many different life themes such as denial, which is found throughout many references in her essay.

Answer 8

Working on it right now.

I know what you are saying. Your sentences need to work harder and carry more weight. Some of them are filler with no impact, so hold on.

Stay away from the word 'many', it is a lazy man's word. The phrase "many different" is a typical phrase that undermines originality.

I want you to read the paragrah's sentences in backward order. It will help you pinpoint the paragraph's weaknesses.

Use of 'denial' : 5 times?

Answer 9

It sounds pretty good to me, except the very first. "Susan Griffin's "Our Secret" seems to clash and not have a flow about it.
I assume this a Book, so, maybe something like;

In Susan Griffin's book; Our Secret, she dicusses .............

In the book; Our Secret, written by Susan Griffin, she dicusses ........................

Maybe this help.

Answer 10

This sounds like a case of "you'd better do your own homework." Sorry.