Please review my song. Do you like it??

Question

Hey I'm an 15 year old kid whos loves songwriting but i want to know. Answer Honestly. Am I any good??? Advice would be appreciated as well.....

Have you ever been so down.
That you wished you were not born.
Like with every step you took
Another problem arised.
Then without warning you crack
You fall to the ground
You shout aloud.
You’re sick of this life.

You know you’ve hit rock bottom.
Whilst your lieing here on the ground.
And no, you can’t go on no more
You’re out of it.
Out of it.

Should have never
Walked through that door
Much worse than not living at all.
Cause Yeah I’ve been to hell and back
And it’s nothing like the brochure
But I tough it out
I rough it out
For the greater good will come

You know you’ve hit rock bottom.
Whilst your lieing here on the ground.
No, you can’t go on no more
You’re out of it.
Out of it.

And as time carries on
Some will struggle to move on
But as a great man once said
If it don’t kill us
It makes us stronger

Answer 1

very good but think you can do better you seam very down write something joyfull

Answer 2

I wonder if the chorus (the 2nd & 4th paragraph I suppose?) will have a nice catchy tune?

But I'm very happy that this song doesn't have expletives. I'm tired of those kinds of songs (heavy metal and hip-hop/rap, especially) that use intense language just to be brashly commercial.

Answer 3

Not bad. Next time do this to make it easier to understand: site where each verse is as well as the chorus/refrain (pre-chorus as well) & the bridge is.

Answer 4

good yessss