Rate my poem!?

Question

Oops, I tripped and
fell
again, on my face
my beard is soaked with missed
sips
from a cracked glass
of home brew that
the last loser
left under this table.
Where are
my pants?

Answer 1

11/10 =] now can u be my friend? cause i think i have ur pants and underwear.......*wink*

Answer 2

Ridiculous!

1) Who falls when they are already under a table drinking beer from a cracked glass that somebody left there? I'll tell you who, nobody.
2) Who keeps cracked glasses? When you drink homebrew you're at someone's house and they throw away the cracked glasses, or just serve it in the bottle.
3) Who misses sips? Outrageous!
4) Your pants burned up in the fire, remember?

I give it a 3 pickles on the standard 5-pickle poetry scale. Work on your imagery. Also any kid can tell you poetry isn't real poetry unless the last word in every line rhymes with the last word on the subsequent line. Unless it's a limerick.

Lather, rinse, repeat.

Answer 3

This poem is fairly sturdy for a beginner, there is defiantly some superb imagery in it, whether it varieties of lacks course, its somewhat perplexing, it starts off with you chuffed you have got here upon somebody, yet they are no longer fairly yours? and then they flow away, that's an excellent storyline, yet you would be able to wish for occasion a factor in the poem whilst they flow away. It would not particularly rhyme in places, which i do no longer blame you for, rhyming poems are very very perplexing, so perchance you should in basic terms attempt non rhyming poems first of all. in case you like the belief of rhyming nevertheless, attempt in basic terms making it lyrical whilst spoken, counting the syllables in keeping with line is a competent thank you to try this. Poetry could nicely be relaxing and intensely enjoyable, i think of you should proceed, you would be able to as nicely make some money! yet you would be able to desire to purchase a e book on writing poetry to truly get the proper outcomes, i opt to propose "the ode much less travelled: unlocking the poet interior" via Stephen Fry, he's astounding and and intensely exciting.

Answer 4

On a scale ranging from infinitely negative numbers to infinitely positive numbmers, I think it is clear that you get:

z - kl^3 + 62%

...where z is a pie, k is your current mood, and L (yes I know it looks like an I) is the percentage chance of your hand going through the next thing you touch. According to quantum mechanics there really is a chance.

In other words... Galapagos.

Answer 5

It stinks.....
but again
I just gotta
love it cos
you devillish
devillish
nasty man
I can almost
smell
your pain
that cold hard
seat
on which you
sleep
has surely
bent your brain
to find your pants
which seem so lost
might be a needy deed
to save us
from your
unclothed crutch
stained deeply where
you peed
follow your nose
you'll hear them say
echoed again.. again
what is that lump
that gutter hump
thats blocking up the drain.

Answer 6

Considering it's you, I give it a 10 out of 10 !!

Answer 7

:) It's the BEST 10/10

Answer 8

Deep Buk, really deep

Answer 9

um its ok....I guess a 4 but the where are my pants kinda threw it off

Answer 10

Wow - those Creative Writing classes sure do pay off.

Maybe you should try them some time.