I wrote a poem and really HAVE to share...
Awakening
Every fiber inside of me
Is bursting and creating new
Energy
Fiery heat encompasses
All that is me
Electric flames
Are licking at my very soul
I cannot think past
The temptation that pulls me
Farther that I ever imagined
Windswept heartstrings
And changing tides
I am new
Creating
Destroying
Ripping away from all that I was
Becoming all I never thought I'd be
2007-05-15 11:31:02 · 29 answers · asked by Trish 5 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Thanks to everyone - I gave thumbs up for all regardless of opinion - I didn't write it to be published or anything, just inspired and wanted to share :)
2007-05-15 11:45:58 · update #1
I found lint in my belly button!
2007-05-15 11:41:00 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
That was really great! You are a great writer, But Y/A (Yahoo Answers) is not the best place to share your work... There are some people on here who will try and pass your work off as their own... But other than that... Loved you poem... Keep up the good work.
2007-05-15 18:38:35 · answer #2 · answered by girl_of_your_dreams_1331 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This is what happens in everyday life
We are forever changing, not outwardly, inside
Sometimes we change for the bad, sometimes good
Temptation to sin keeps us from being what we should
There's a fire in my bones, but it is for Christ
My heartstrings are pulled by the desire to do right
The changing tides are tribulations and trials
Creating a spirit that is Christlike
Destroying a flesh that vial
I have become a person I never thought I'd be
Filled with love and humble, saved by grace and free
2007-05-15 18:57:20 · answer #3 · answered by tawannamramiresc 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Good poem. I like people that can express themselves through poetry. I do the same. It was really good:) It's a good way to express the way you feel inspiration and whatnot.
2007-05-16 00:58:35 · answer #4 · answered by T_BIRD 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Great poem! From one poet to another.
2007-05-15 18:37:41 · answer #5 · answered by webdoll62 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Nice energy and tone - to help support that movement you create with your words, I would think about your line length so it's maybe a bit smoother.....I like it!
2007-05-15 18:35:32 · answer #6 · answered by LionessB 3 · 2⤊ 2⤋
You sound like the dude that sings for Linkin Park.
2007-05-15 18:34:54 · answer #7 · answered by The Truth 4 · 3⤊ 2⤋
Fantastic poem...I love the line "windswept heartstrings"
2007-05-15 18:35:26 · answer #8 · answered by ♥Tiilynn♥ 4 · 2⤊ 2⤋
Not bad but do not quit your day job just yet.
2007-05-15 18:35:18 · answer #9 · answered by peanutbulls 4 · 3⤊ 1⤋
Did you run spell check on that before you posted it? Find the typo?!?!?!
2007-05-15 18:35:16 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 1⤋