I give you a new form. The American Sonnet...What do you think?

Question

An "American" Sonnet

The 20s were a prime time,
and everyone who could would,
swill bathtub gin and near beer,
from some notorious rough tough.

They'd dance away the night tight,
in dresses that were cloth froth,
for life was always pay day,
a flappered "jazz age" flick kick.

Then 30 followed smash crash,
depression murdered mock-stock.
The job-world lay abed dead,
head covered well with black sack.

Old Hoover sang a rote note,
and Roosevelt won the vote tote.

Answer 1

not too bad...very nicely written. "A Sonnet For America".

Answer 2

Sonnet #14

my love ascends amnesiac stairs/sube mi amor escaleras
amnesicas
where my sanity starves my lunacy begins/donde mi
cordura pasa hambre comienza mi locura/to swindle
itself out of itself/para estafarse uno a si miso
/while these feelings bail/mientras achico estos
sentimientos/this innundated sinking skiff in a
storm/este esquife inundado se hunde en la
tormenta/lashed to its prow my arms unfurl/azotado en
la proa mis brazos se abren /gather sky in giant
hungry gulps/mi amor, reune el cielo a grandes tragos
voraces four sheets in the sails/las velas hechas de
cuatro sabanas like a pauper sups from his beggars
bowl/como 'un pobre/su tazon de mendigo tiny bits of
gruel/trocitos de aguachirle/ eye confide in its'
wisdom: the fool/ojo confio en su sabiduría tonta-que'
necio/the blood knows all secrets/la sangre sabe todos
los secretos/the heart never tells/el corazon nunca
los cuenta
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By EJ Priestley

Answer 3

I am not an American so this one did'nt touch a cord in me BUTT!!!!!!!!
The story you sent to me that you had written...(.Bright Eyes)
Has been turned into a little book and my kids want it read everynight!! I have been meaning to email you about this but here it is anyway...It was beautiful, many thanks to you for giving my family such a beautiful gift!
Blessings!
Ariel
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