I need suggestions?

Question

' It has been said time and time again, that each person has a reason for thier existance. Whether it is a religious matter, or a matter of evolution...the general public seems to have not decided. What we do know, however, is that alot of people spend thier whole entire life searching for their 'purpose'. On the other hand, for a very select few, they knew what they're going to do with their life, for as long as they can remember.
Jayson Bronerbyze is one of the 'very select few'. By age five, he knew that for as long as he could...he would play the piano.'
Is that a good opening for a feature story? Its just a snippet of it so far, I just need to know what yall think. It goes on to later say that he is now 54 years old, and still playing the piano. Any suggestions??

Answer 1

It may depend on how long the story is. If it is a long story, then you probably are OK. If it is a newspaper-article size, you might be taking a little too long to get to the point.

Remember, you don't have a whole lot of time to capture someone's attention, and I wondered where you were going. If the story is a few thousand words, then the leisurely approach might work fine.