Not Fair!
Can you smile and cry
At the very same time?
Can you forget about someone
But always have them in mind?
Can you frown and laugh
And not feel outta place?
Can you hate someone
But their memory you can’t replace?
Can you love and hate
And know you feel true?
Can you love someone
And can you hate them too?
Can you hurt and want to laugh?
Can you be happy and cry?
Can you say “I love you too”
And know it’s not a lie?
If not, why do I hate your hurt?
But still love you all the same?
And why I cringe when I hear your voice
Or when someone calls your name?
You play me round unfairly
You make my heart hurt and ache,
But why when I don’t hear from you
Does my heart hurt and break?
2007-05-11 16:12:54 · 14 answers · asked by stevieglenwright 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Ok, yes i did write this! i realize the spelling is shocking, but thats w=not what you are reading it for!!
Thanks for any comments (good or bad)
2007-05-11 16:14:58 · update #1
very ying and yang-ish.....tells the side of both feelings very well. Don't listen to the negative....just keep writing from your soul....it will help.....you and at least some one else
2007-05-13 09:16:12 · answer #1 · answered by bethybug 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is a very well written poem and gets your points across to the reader. Keep up the good work!!!
PS- Whoever caused this pain has lost out on someone very special and talented.
2007-05-11 17:10:27 · answer #2 · answered by Mary B In Chester 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poetry comes from the heart. And sometimes the best poetry comes from a broken heart.
Thank You for sharing!
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2007-05-11 16:35:21 · answer #3 · answered by BlueFeather 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's cool, universal. everybody crosses some point of your poem at some time in life. Write on!
2007-05-11 16:36:36 · answer #4 · answered by damron 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
everyone can right a poem but it that a true poet to write from the heart ur poem is filled with emotion and soul...
2007-05-11 17:48:54 · answer #5 · answered by sweet_oreo 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hey, thats great, and so true to most people.
Your spelling is perfect.
Well Done.
2007-05-11 16:24:03 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice flow, sad message. Good work.
2007-05-11 22:19:21 · answer #7 · answered by Ali 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
obvious that you were feeling hurt when you wrote it...
awkward may i put it but tis what i say
thoughts need not be written this way
throw your thoughts, feel the pain
accept its essence, and then you'd gain...
ciao bambina... = )
2007-05-11 17:03:38 · answer #8 · answered by VeRDuGo 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ok thats long boring and pointless to me but dont take my advice im just a fat gamer nerd who only says uber pwnage or owng ttyl bff.
2007-05-11 16:20:19 · answer #9 · answered by golfman123 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It very nice really, you should make a song with that,,,
2007-05-12 01:45:03 · answer #10 · answered by frida81 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋