girl you been runnin on my mind
i just cant keep u oof my sight
im gonna love you until tonight
i know we dont belong and its hard to be together
ignore all bad comments just say whatever
my head says no
but my heart says go
all i think bout is u when i walk out the door
please forgive me babe didnt mean to do wrong
none of them know that our relationship is very strong
im head over heels for u gurl and u know that
i just way u felt the same way back
we knew eachother since we were so small
dont be like that make our love fall
never cheated on u and u know it gurl
your so special to me you make my head twirl
didnt know what i was gonna do when i lost you babe
im still asking for forgivness until today
all i think is that i need to make it all good
i hope u hear this song and hope that u understood
that what i did was wrong an you are all i need
so gurl forgive me please
i tried and tried to make it up but there aint nothing else to do
im sorry gurl i love u
2007-05-09 17:18:47 · 16 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music ➔ Rap and Hip-Hop
I think it's very good, considering your age. As you write more and more throughout the years, everything will improve. Who knows? We could be hearing you on the radio in a few years =)
2007-05-09 18:17:57 · answer #1 · answered by alc051001 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Sounds good, but I'm with chasity - what are you asking forgiveness for? You say you did something wrong (twice), but I can't figure it out. And why would you only love her "until tonight"? That wouldn't seem to impress the young lady.
Overall, it is good; it just needs a little polishing. Good luck with it all.
2007-05-10 01:17:51 · answer #2 · answered by RDW928 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Wow it is really cool.
U should try 2 keep up do not break up.
Try 2 make her happy.
And try in a secret way 2 show her your song and when she has finished it act as if u didn't know she was reading it.
Good luck
2007-05-10 01:27:09 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Amazing. Will everything be spelled right in the final edited draft?
2007-05-10 00:48:37 · answer #4 · answered by peteryoung144 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
nice. though ive heard the same story before. check also your spelling
2007-05-10 01:28:33 · answer #5 · answered by andrea 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its good but capitisation would be good.Songs are written from the heart.
2007-05-10 01:31:35 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yeah its ok but if you didnt cheat on her then why are yall breakin up?
2007-05-10 00:52:44 · answer #7 · answered by karin 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
nice its really good .. needs some editing but for 13 i like it
2007-05-10 01:15:21 · answer #8 · answered by Eclipse 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Epic suckage.
2007-05-10 01:13:45 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
yeah kool song
2007-05-10 01:26:19 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋